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February 12th-October 6th 1997

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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 07-16-99 03:05 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

This is a continuation of February 11th a poem about my mother you can find it in the forum somewhere

The little boy with weary eyes never wanting more
Then to be left in his room with a lock on his door
Though a lack of ambition always prevented
His grandma loved him and his grandpa resented

Everyday he would lay watching Bogie and Bacall
And he would watch the Big Sleep into which he would fall
And cats seven of them decorated his room
Just waiting to be found for a need to exhume

A two story house with those long halls never ending
Each led to darkened rooms where sadness was spending
Shared memories of one who departed so dear
Saddled with emotion of loss anger and fear.

Tension arose between the grandfather and son
There was an estate to be cleaned and jobs to be done
The boy always stayed tired but so wanted to rise
But everywhere he looked he saw his momma’s eyes

He could see his mother in his nighttime vision
Dreaming of that day he made that decision
His mother would awake from that dreadful coma
He would wake with a start and grab for a soma

Except for the seven cats the room was empty
And he knew then at once where his mother would be
One black cat for each white cat lived life in his room
And that added some mixture of gray and of gloom

Then one day all so fast his grandfather was through
He was tired of this boy having nothing to do
He crept in with a gun kept under his pillow
The big man moved quietly appearing a willow

The boy awoke amidst the middle of a dream
He did not faint or beg or offer a scream
A silent understanding they had come to share
And the very next day the boy was not there

He roamed all the streets walking into each store
Sun hurting his eyes, birds singing hurt more
He missed his cats and his grandmother’s love
Grandfather was back there with threatening glove

A job was in hand he returned triumphantly
Both of his grandparents were so happy to see
He bought a computer and plugged in the cord
It was a fateful thing God helped him afford

His prayers for so long had been just to be kissed
Would might then that it be his mother not missed?
He met many women on that computer that day
More in his room little by little he did stay

Then one day the boy not wanting more grew bold
He asked out a girl without asking how old
He only cared to see what she would look like
A nose ring a tattoo and hair in a spike

He would not be derailed his ambition returned
After prayer and more dates he started to learn
The best company found his cats lying around
But then one day a fair was coming to town

An online attraction he asked her to go
And waited those seconds one waits to hear no
But she said yes and as the date of the fair came
He remembered to ask so she told him her name

The days he waited he was at peace with the world
Something was telling him that this was the girl
Might be that his momma was telling him yes
This is the one that years of prayer have blessed

A knock on the door there had need not be two
Yes as he waited a cat puked on his shoe
He ran down the hall he was lost in the moment
Oh too be young in such a blissful descent

A fateful day as the one that had gone past
He ran with such glee not knowing it would last
He threw on the lights and this time with more care
The door opened slowly his future was there

To Be Concluded
note: this is all true not unbelievieably so just wanted the reader to know

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-16-99).]
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1 posted 07-16-99 03:06 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

You ROCK, walt!!!!

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2 posted 07-16-99 03:09 AM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

Let me add my praise, the second voice of a long line. This story does show the silver cloud, and the fact that it is so true, and so heartfelt makes it one of the best I've ever had the pleasure of sharing.

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3 posted 07-16-99 03:15 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

wow Walt! awesome piece.. you was telling me how you love my dreamy works.. but I love the REAL feel in yurs!!

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4 posted 07-16-99 03:42 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Dreamy said it, Walt! You rock! Wonderful work! Love it!

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5 posted 07-16-99 04:16 AM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

Fabulous!!! Your Best Walt!
tori
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6 posted 07-16-99 04:59 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Walt,
You have manage to make me laugh and cry in the same breath, not since steal magnolias has this occurred

I guess what I really want to say is this was so powerful that, I felt it~~ I saw it~~ and I can't wait till the next part cause I've about chewed my nails off..... ????
cliff hangers geeze!!

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[This message has been edited by tori (edited 07-16-99).]
wayoutwalt
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7 posted 07-16-99 12:51 PM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i have worked a lil bit here to fix the bugs in this one i was just bit too quick to post it thanx for the feedback all!
Nan
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8 posted 07-16-99 01:05 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Walt, as easy as it is to write about the things in life that you love, it can be equally as difficult to write about the people you love. This is a wonderful story about your experiences - Keep it coming - It's the best subject matter of all!!
Nicole
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9 posted 07-16-99 03:02 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Walt, I must say that I read your first poem so many times that I almost have it memorized. I refrained from replying simply because it left me speechless. After reading this one, I have to comment! It moved me in such a strong way. I too am 24, and almost 3 years ago, I came unspeakably close to losing my daughter to diabetes. You have touched on so many feelings that I have kept pent up for so long. I would never assume to say that I understand your pain...but I feel for you. I came so close to having to make the same decision. I'll cut this off before I get really gooshy!! Thank you so much for sharing these poems. **tears and big smile!**

wayoutwalt
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10 posted 08-26-99 12:49 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

it is hard for me to pull up from the cellar one o my own but this is a continuation of feb11th that was recently pulled from below by good ole hoot thought might like to know the rest of the story
 
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