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KTrail99
Junior Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 14


0 posted 1999-07-15 05:42 PM


I wish, dad, that you could meet her
My wife, my love, my soulmate
You would like her
She was brought to me by fate

I wish it did not have to be,
You left so suddenly

Would my life have turned?
Or been this way
If your death was spurned
If you had not gone away

Fate took you from me,
But gave me a great lady

It is funny now and then
We have to lose to win
However, I still wish you could have been
Here for me, to be proud and see me when

I was alone and dejected,
Then she came along and I became elated

I was happy and smiling, because of her
I think at times how much I fancy
Having you beside me, being my father
Seeing your resemblance in my progeny

© Copyright 1999 KTrail99 - All Rights Reserved
jfreak
Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA
1 posted 1999-07-15 06:04 PM


Very nice, so far. I think it isn't finished yet though. It just seems to me that you may have written it like this to keep it open for more additions in the future. There is nothing like a tribute to a good father. So many bad ones out there, we really need to honor the good ones. Keep up the good work.

Jfreak

snuffleupagus
Junior Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 11

2 posted 1999-07-16 02:08 AM


very good. *bwkotl*
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