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Sleepless Nights

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blueloon
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since 07-07-99
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0 posted 07-15-99 11:39 AM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for blueloon

From the core it burns
through the feilds of joy
it blazes
into the darkness
it smothers

rainbows dance
over the earth we hover
silently we pine within
although together

Into slumber I fall
warmth behind me
a chill within me
three hearts are heard to beat

The car travels on
down an empty road
one headlight out
the other steering
toward obscureness

Answering the phone
a voice is heard
dialogue is an illusion
gumption is spoken
phone drops
the connection cut

Early morning

Sign of warning
life within
danger is near
persecute the battle
notify the body
of the womb that beats

cancel the fore warning
place a pillow
beneath my head
rock the crib
sing me a lullaby
for I am your only baby
© Copyright 1999 blueloon - All Rights Reserved
snuffleupagus
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1 posted 07-15-99 12:29 PM       View Profile for snuffleupagus   Email snuffleupagus   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for snuffleupagus

I don't get it?
blueloon
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2 posted 07-15-99 01:38 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

snuffle...It is your own interpretation that makes poetry read...It is mine that makes it write... hint...before sleep,during sleep, and waking from sleep...yet everything takes place while in bed!
blueloon
mia
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3 posted 07-15-99 01:55 PM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mia

Maybe this is going to sound really weird and this thought will maybe not be properly conveyed but here I go.
There is nothing like good salad. You know, all those beautiful fresh veggies, that you picked in the garden that you are growing in your backyard, tossed together to create a whole. What sweet taste in your mouth. Well a poem is really like a salad...some poeple like ceasar, some like garden or potato but the combination is still delicious to the perosn who eats in and it is opening your mind to try a variety of flavors. Blueloon...this poem was one of the best salads that I ever tasted...your words were carefully picked in the garden of your mind, they were tossed together to create a perfect whole and I ate with appetite. You are a wonderful cook and I look forward to tasting more of your dishes...

luv
mia
quote99
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4 posted 07-15-99 02:17 PM       View Profile for quote99   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quote99

Huh? I was so confused and lost on this one. I love salad too, but this seemed overtossed to me. Like putting lettuce and spaghetti together.
mia
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5 posted 07-15-99 02:52 PM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mia

You are a poet right? Well haven't you ever just had a rush of words splash in your mind and it's like your pen can't keep up...like your thoughts are going a thousand miles a second... and these words...when they appear...they make sense to you. They don't have to make sense to anyone else... as long as they speak your heart. What you feel. They don't eaven have to mean a thing. Poetry is an expression of yourself it makes a statement. You read this poem...you commented and so the author of this one had his words read and seen, which is what he wanted by posting it here.
Anyways... not every poem was written to be understood... simply to be felt. And you felt something when you read...the poem reached its goal.

I like it.
blueloon
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6 posted 07-15-99 02:54 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

Thank you Mia for your kind words... quote99, If you read my reply to snuffle there may be a hint as to what I was trying to convey...a young unmarried women scared that she may be with child..."three hearts are heard to beat" yet there are only two people in the bed.
blueloon
poetFemmeFatale
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since 07-25-99
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7 posted 07-27-99 10:10 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Aaahhh blueloon, once again, you challenge my mind to keep up with yours!! Loved it, and also thought it deserved to go to the top again!!

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

blueloon
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8 posted 07-27-99 03:32 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

Thank you again for your kind words...
blueloon

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To give yourself keeps yourself still,
And you must live, drawn by your own sweet skill.
-shakespeare
LngJhnAg
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since 07-23-99
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion


9 posted 07-27-99 04:01 PM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

yanno, ol' Blue

This hare board is for ussen menfolk, too! Yew cain't go confusin' us wif them thar purty werds. - lol

I had a little trouble following this poem - I thought it had something to do with a baby, but then you slam dunked me with the end. You are very, very complex. I actually find that I enjoyed this poem - now - I gotta go back and read it again because I forgot what it said. :-)
blueloon
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10 posted 07-28-99 05:37 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

LngJhn, I must say that you were right it is about a baby...or what I thought was going to be a baby...false alarm...so that leaves me the other baby....a little too complex to explain I guess... Thanks for the feedback though...you're the greatest!
blueloon
 
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