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The Pit.. part II

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Gentle Soul
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0 posted 07-15-99 01:51 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Gentle Soul

Trying not to look back.. she keeps her head high, forgetting to look where she is going, she slips off the side, out of darkangel's control, he cant seem to catch her she returns to the darkside, crying and entrapped by Jealousy, Depression, and Lust... Gentle Soul feels useless, and stuck..

crying out loud, she's knows not what to do for, in her tied chair, she falls down the pit in dispair, feeling as if Love, and Joy, and Content are gone forever, she lands in the pit, cold and ashamed.
as she sits there crying.. Fear appears at her side.. taunting and teasing making such noises, she cries out in her moods.. calling for Joy.. as along with Fear, Guilt, and Doubt came with him. She cries out in pain screaming for help... as she sees a small light it resembles dark angel, at a far.. She yells and screams, "DarkAngel! there you are!" he suddenly appears, and stands by GentleSoul's side as she cries and struggles, asking darkangel to untie her..

Trying to do it.. Darkangel cant do it..
for Gentlesoul made her mess.. she must go thru it herself, with Darkangel by her side, coaching her on.. she takes a deep breath, tears in her eyes, she looks at her foes, then by her side, she sees the sincerity in her angel's eyes, she smiles partially and concentrates on the knots.

not knowing where to start.. she cries and almost stops.. not knowing what to do.. she looks again at her light, and starts to unravel knots.



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1 posted 07-15-99 01:54 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Sweet mother of God, you did excellent work! I mean that, absolutely.

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2 posted 07-15-99 01:57 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Phenomenal.....what else can I say? Another great piece, Gentle Soul.

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Dragon
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3 posted 07-15-99 03:39 AM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

It's with tears in my eyes that I write this.You have done beautifully.May I also be at your side?
Gentle Soul
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4 posted 07-15-99 10:26 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

well.. Thank you for the replies... and Dragon.. Im sorry.. Darkangel knows every knook and cranny of me.. and at this point I dont think I could tell anyone else some of things my angel knows...
But Thank you for sharing...

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5 posted 07-15-99 11:28 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Sweet Gentle soul.....again you have transported my mind to rhat special realm. I have hopes the saga will continue......
Gentle Soul
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6 posted 07-15-99 11:58 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

yes.. it will continue... as long as Im feelin like this.. I will continue to write about the pit..

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