I really, really liked where this was going until I got there. Very beautiful, very sensual, but the ending was not what I expected - shocking. If that's what you were going for, great job! - And now that I take a second read, the theme was there all the time. Damn, but we mortals can be so blind sometimes.
Listening to every heart
You may want to check with the moderator; this probably belongs in the Adult Section. Thought process is good. I have a tough time getting past typographical errors because they disturb my thought process. If you are composing them in a word program, you might want to do a spell check first before posting. The timing of the poem is good, moving from past to present in a flick of a sentence. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow