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Dragon
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0 posted 07-14-99 04:07 PM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dragon

Ah! Darkness, My Lover,
My Friend.
I can feel you....comming.
Covering me,
Caressing me,
Taking me in.

Your Velvety Warmth
Your touch of Fire,
Wrapping me in comfort..
Eternal Hell's Fire.

I hear the screams,
Of pain and torture.
Oh,How I long to be with them...
To let your fires burn this Stone Heart to Ashes.

To fell the Talons
Of your Mighty Hands
Piercing the Flesh
Of my Body and Soul.
Succoring Me
Freeing Me
Forever
In Darkness.
© Copyright 1999 Dragon - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Soul
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1 posted 07-14-99 07:53 PM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

that is really deep.. touches my heart.. but I suppose its just cuz... darkness to me isnt a good thing.. but to each his own eh? ;-)

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Dragon
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2 posted 07-14-99 08:39 PM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

Thank-You your words me much to me.THis is only my second attempt at trying ti express my feelings.
quote99
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3 posted 07-14-99 09:46 PM       View Profile for quote99   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quote99

Your rhyme fell off towards the end and the meter was inconsistant, but I see where you were going with this.
DreamEvil
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4 posted 07-14-99 09:50 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Rhyme and meter are not as important as expressing yourself well. You did great for only your second time.

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Dragon
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5 posted 07-14-99 10:35 PM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

Thank -You both for the help and encouragement.I need all the help I can get!!
wayoutwalt
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6 posted 07-16-99 11:47 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

they get ever better dragon you were potential is great
Dragon
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7 posted 07-16-99 08:18 PM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

Thank-you Walt.Words do escaped me.
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8 posted 07-21-99 10:56 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

................Loved it...................

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

 
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