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Last Night

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tori
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Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA


0 posted 07-14-99 09:04 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

I'm just a child who walked along the way
In the dark and vile night
my youth just slipped away
Shadow called depression,
a dark and dingy gray
Attacked by cultures expectations
I fight for life to stay
I saw a life force glowing bright
I watched it wash away
No place to find refuge,
a spark of brighter day's
No longer do I hold them,
I know not where they stray
Listening to the verdict
who's web I now shall weave
Till dusk shall be departed
and life no longer free
I am just a child who walked along the way
If you see my footsteps
walk over where they lay
Find your path to walk in,
and hope that you can stay
In empty space I linger
I cling to have reprieve

I am

just

a child

who

walked.

vlh. 1998
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If with pen in hand I have made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink

Me two DE..
© Copyright 1999 Victoria Hosier/tori - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 07-14-99 09:35 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

The depth in this one is very good. Where you say "cultures expectations" had me thinking of vultures circling. Good imagery. I also see a person running from the law, knowing he/she will be caught. Although dark, it has been well done.

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Sunshine

Words will always express our feelings true.
KRJ

tori
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2 posted 07-14-99 09:42 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

No they didn't run they walked but not in the right direction
This came form seeing all thoes little kids with guns ..
Thanks for the kind words
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I've not wasted one drop of ink
~one voice~
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3 posted 07-14-99 12:43 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Tori, you've stirred my own feelings of fear. Wonderful piece of art!

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~one voice~
*You are you, and I am I, and if by chance we find each other, it's beautiful.*

 
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