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Missing Link To What Was Once Mine

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Andrew Scott
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0 posted 07-13-99 03:50 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Andrew Scott

Once I claimed her mine
But she's missing now
No, I didn't lose her
She was stolen, that's how

I went off to play
And when I came back
Emptiness I met
Like the color black

I searched in vain
I scoured the ground
A solitary link
Was all that I found

Cut through, snipped in two
At a loss I did stand
Proof of what I once had
The ring in my hand

Man! She was a great ride
None other like her's
Custom built lines
Electric chrome features

She took me places
Others would not go
Freedom was her call
We never went slow

But now it's over
Gone to someone new
Hope he treats her well
I bid you a fond adieu

To you who took her
Damn! Who ever you are
She belonged to me
And to walk is too far


[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (edited 07-13-99).]
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elvira
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1 posted 07-13-99 05:35 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

well done!!!...something light among all the sad love poems
Andrew Scott
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2 posted 07-13-99 05:59 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Ms. Elvira: Thanks for noticing this one. If you think about it, this poem does have somewhat of a sad lost love theme.

Anyone care to guess what was stolen?
How about the perpetrator?
blueloon
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3 posted 07-13-99 08:15 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

I must take a stab at this one... A bike is what was stolen, or at least that is what read through...I enjoyed the bounce in this one, sad but light.
blueloon
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4 posted 07-13-99 09:38 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Definitely a bike, I think. Well-spoken.
Andrew Scott
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5 posted 07-14-99 11:38 AM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Not much of a brain teaser as to what was stolen. Blueloon & Balladeer, you win the prize. Ahhh... but the question remains. Who was the thief? Consider the bike as a symbol for something else, as well as the next to last stanza where a vague hint lies.
blueloon
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6 posted 07-14-99 12:21 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

Andrew, I must reply for you have left me wondering who the damn theif is... After reading that stanza over and over I have to guess that the bike was stolen eihter on an airplane or boat? The more I read it over the more ideas I have!
blueloon
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7 posted 07-14-99 12:37 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

HMMMMM...what a mystery! So who is the thief, Andrew??? Enquiring minds want to know!

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~one voice~
*You are you, and I am I, and if by chance we find each other, it's beautiful.*

Andrew Scott
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8 posted 07-14-99 04:00 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Within this poem, the bicycle is a symbol of youth. The thief was "time" or "old age," for youth has "gone to someone new."
elvira
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9 posted 07-14-99 04:40 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

thanks for pointing out the underlying meaning Andrew, the bike i spotted while reading the first time, yet not the deeper meaning, after re-reading the poem it seems even better

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My One and Only ... Childhood Memories ... your countenance ... hoarse whispers ... serving wench ... stolen hours ... devotion ... Master

 
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