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Princess Lily
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0 posted 07-13-99 03:34 AM       View Profile for Princess Lily   Email Princess Lily   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Princess Lily

Sadness dwells inside of me
The pain I feel-you cannot see
I once showed how sad I was
You thought it would help to show your love
But what you do not understand
Is that my sadness cannot be cured by the touch of a hand
So you got me help and you think it's over
A counsler,some pills,and a gentle hug
I hate to say it, but that isn't enough
For some reason no matter what I do
No matter how hard I try
I can't get over it
I always cry
I no longer want to kill myself
But to be happy and normal and love myself
I love my family and my friends
But for some ungodly reason I just don't feel complete
I feel that I will never be truly happy
So don't get me another counsler
I'll keep taking the pills
And when I said hugs just weren't enough I didn't mean don't give me one
Because every once in a while when I start to cry
Your arms around me - make me feel alright



[This message has been edited by Princess Lily (edited 07-13-99).]
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1 posted 07-13-99 03:37 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thrilling to be so chilling, isn't it?

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Princess Lily
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2 posted 07-13-99 04:08 AM       View Profile for Princess Lily   Email Princess Lily   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Princess Lily

Not sure what was meant but thank you for reading my poem.I can promise that there will be more to come

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe
Princess Lily
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3 posted 07-30-99 01:21 AM       View Profile for Princess Lily   Email Princess Lily   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Princess Lily

I would really like opinions on this poem--thank you!!

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe

*A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive*



[This message has been edited by Princess Lily (edited 07-30-99).]
Alwye
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4 posted 07-30-99 01:27 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Painfully sad..thank you for sharing your tale. You truly have talent with words. Remember I am here to listen, my friend. *hugs*

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*Krista Knutson*

"I will sail my vessel 'till the river runs dry, like a bird upon the wind, these waters are my sky..." Garth Brooks

Princess Lily
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5 posted 07-30-99 01:30 AM       View Profile for Princess Lily   Email Princess Lily   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Princess Lily

Many thanx to my new and cherished friend Krista.Love~Lily

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe

*A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive*

angel girl
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6 posted 07-30-99 07:10 AM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

i know exactly how you feel. i'm on prozac along with 2 other medications. i am being forced to see a phycologist and a phyciatrist (i doubt those are spelled right). no matter how hard i try, or what people try to do, nothing works. i feel the same way about "don't get me another counsler" and "I'll keep taking the pills."
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7 posted 07-30-99 07:14 AM       View Profile for angel girl   Email angel girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angel girl

lily, i would really like to talk to you. e-mail me if you feel the same way.

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LngJhnAg
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8 posted 07-30-99 10:44 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Lily

What do I think? Well, the poem didn't flow as well as some of your others, and I did have a bit of a time picking up the rhythm because it got broken around the middle of the poem. And there was a depressing recurrent reversion back to the theme of medication and the counselling. All in all....

I think the poem was powerful, pure, and conveyed incredible emotions of depression and confusion. Don't change a SINGLE word. You captured every forlorn, hopeless, dark feeling all of us have felt at times in our lives when things seemed their most hopeless. This is a fine, fine piece of writing. You should be proud of it, and you should save it. There will be days when you think that you know how you felt now; and, when you reread this work of art, you will be reminded that there is no way a person can truly remember it all, and you will again realize from whence you came.

This is a GREAT poem. You ought to be proud.
Princess Lily
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9 posted 07-30-99 01:57 PM       View Profile for Princess Lily   Email Princess Lily   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Princess Lily

Thank you for the reply angel girl.I will e-mail you very soon~Lily


Long John--It is positively wonderful to recieve replies from you.Thank you for the honest opinion.And now that you have read it and told me what you think.I believe that I truly am proud ~Lily

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe

*A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive*

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