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February 11th 1997

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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 07-13-99 01:48 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

It was early morning a young boy arose
Grabbed his money and slipped on his clothes
The same he wore when he stole in that night
To find his mother was still to be all right

On his face he wore a hateful little smirk
She had been sick for a month dodging their work
A sore on her foot that never was heeling
She said it would kill her he still was unfeeling

Selfish little boy to think of her that way
Would he regret it for the rest of his days?
He had always loved his mother to be sure
But for these last seconds a lifetime to cure

It was dark in the hall he tiptoed descending
Life as he knew it soon to be ending
Frozen in time with wishes to rewind
If only he had the presence of mind

And still one last chance for regret
As still another second he had yet
He threw on the lights a bastard uncaring
To find his mother lying there staring

On that night the world was left spinning
The stars all black the devil was grinning
But God was there ever forgiving
His head to her heart still she was living

The ambulance came and took her away
He followed so close as he could belay
But the only security that was to be found
That annoying siren was still making sound

In the emergency room for hours he waited
His prayers did flow though a bit belated
No one would speak or tell him the worst
They all looked on him as if he was cursed

He knew He knew he had to have known
The rest of his life he would wander alone
He cried with no shoulder he always had thought
Would be there forever if he got this distraught

The chaplain calmed him but offered no lie
He told the boy soon his mother would die
They sat and they prayed and there’s nothing belated
So into the night those two brothers waited

The term the doctor used “Son will you pull the plug?”
A term most used as a sobering drug
A little boy with a decision to make
Never thinking later a murderer would make

And on February 11th 1997
My dearest mother was greeted in heaven
And with poems such as this one that I lay down
My momma I love her she’ll always be around


Sadly this poem is true

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-13-99).]

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-14-99).]
© Copyright 1999 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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1 posted 07-13-99 01:50 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Walt, you outdid yourself. You pushed hard enough and nailed this one.

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2 posted 07-13-99 02:14 AM       View Profile for Moonlight   Email Moonlight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonlight's Home Page   View IP for Moonlight

Walt, I am so grateful that some people are still able to share feelings like that. I'm sorry that the pain has to exist, but I'm very glad that an outlet has been found.
This was an extraordinary piece. I hope you'll always be able to hold your pen to your heart and let it flow like this...
this was really beautiful.

*hugs* thank you for sharing this with all of us.

~moonlight~
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3 posted 07-13-99 02:23 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

wow, incredibly heart wrenching...I feel for you. What a heartfelt piece.

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4 posted 07-13-99 03:02 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Walt, I don't even know what to say... Magnificent work, stunning topic. I am so glad that you shared this. Thank you.

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5 posted 07-13-99 09:25 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Shamelessly moving this up for a friend.
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6 posted 07-13-99 09:59 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

Too bad this happens more often than we know.
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7 posted 07-13-99 10:39 AM       View Profile for leelew   Email leelew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit leelew's Home Page   View IP for leelew

I know your Mother is reading this,and she loves you forever........she will always be there....if only you look.Truly a soul searching poem.
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8 posted 07-13-99 06:59 PM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

The tears for such a hard decision you had to make. May the peace you know be that you allowed her to sleep after a life that surely was full, after all, she had you for a son. This was beautiful Walt, truly moving.

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I know this was very difficult for you to write, Walt. You struggled with it, but it was worth it. Murderer? no. Loving son, yes. I'm glad you finally were able to write this and I know you are, too. Good job! It moved me very much.
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10 posted 07-14-99 12:49 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Poetry can be a catharsis for pain. Sharing your pain can sometimes lighten your load. Thank you for sharing your pain with us.
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Is love giving the ultimate gift?
Easing another's suffering if we can?
This was beautiful and poignant. Thanks for posting this
Izzy

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12 posted 07-14-99 01:17 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Absolutely heart felt Walt..
The story's of our lives we put to poetry is the true art of our craft, and the labor of our love for it.
Applause, Applause, Applause!!
I agree with Poet deVine, sharing our pain is letting go of it,
Being a Diabetic for 35 years I'm aware of what can happen with just a little sore on the foot !
So I've told my son's in present tense,
Remember she gave you life, you gave her peace
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If with pen in hand I've made you think
Then I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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13 posted 07-14-99 03:37 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

My mother would not take care of herself she allowed her wound to fester also we were so poor we couldn't afford her diabetic medication..she would never take a handout from anyone oh how i treated her so poor when i was resenting her all laid up in bed while i was resumin the family buisness alone...then i found her...she died of toxic shock complicated by a diabetic coma...i told her goodbye as i told them to kill her and i think she was aware i was killing her...but my peace is made yes thank you all
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14 posted 07-14-99 12:59 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Walt, I'm so sorry to hear this...I have family that is diabetic also... I commend you for sharing this with us- it couldn't have been easy.

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Wow Walt... very powerful! Im sorry to hear about that tho... my heart and prayers go out to you *hugs*

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Hi, I'm new here, so please forgive me for asking these questions. Is this free verse? Some of the lines sort of rhyme and some sort of don't so I was just wondering if that's the way it is. I wanted to read some poems before putting any of mine here so I stumbled on this one. You must be young to have been a boy in 1997 and writing about it now it's good that someone so young can be allowed to write stuff here as I was worried I would not fit in.
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17 posted 07-15-99 10:30 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i dunno i thought the rhyming was ok...to explain the 1997 no i didnt use it just cuz it rhymes with heaven...i am 24 and this did just happen 2 years ago but it seems a lifetime ago so i used the term lil boy cuz i was so immature and innocent then but have seen alot sinc...i plan on making this a three parter of my year of 1997 and ill be a lil boy till i learn something yes
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18 posted 07-15-99 02:42 PM       View Profile for Augchic711   Email Augchic711   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Augchic711

walt~
thank you for sharing this! you did it so well i could feel your pain so greatly and i understand how you feel so young when you are so innocent one day but then something happens causing you to grow up the very next day! Walt you have a unspeakable talent i have nothing to say that could possibly describe it!

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19 posted 07-15-99 05:06 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I told you did good, Wally.

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Walt...this was extreamly sad. Guilt is a hard thing to live with, but I have found that for thebetter part...we tend to blame ourselves for something that no matter what, we could not have prevented. I am sorry for your loss, but Walt, please do be kind to yourself.
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Walt, I think you did a terrific job with this! I imagine this was very difficult to write and brought the pain back fresh. I am truly sorry for your loss. My friend, don't look at it as killing her. Look at it as setting her free from her pain. She is in a better place with no sickness now. God bless you Walt! Don't let guilt over-run you. You did the best thing for her! Thanks for sharing this!!!!
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22 posted 08-25-99 02:05 PM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Well done Walt....I know exactly where this came from in your heart pal.....
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23 posted 08-25-99 07:20 PM       View Profile for caroline   Email caroline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for caroline

walt this is a tremendously heartfelt work. I am honored to read such deep, deep feelings on such a difficult part of your life. I don't think your mother would have thought of it as killing her...I believe she is surely proud that you showed how much you really love her by freeing her of pain. Not anyone can make that kind of decision. You are a strong and compassionate soul. Thanks for sharing this.

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