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Primitive Self Awareness

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Sunshine
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If I were to let you into my Self,
completely, individually, altogether,
And be yours absolutely
Would you own me?

If I were to let you ridicule me
And scorn me, tear me down
And make me feel so miniscule
Would you own me?

If I were to fear you, and prostrate
Myself beneath you
Hold my breath to not displease you
Would you own me?

If I were to acquiesce, and try to tease you
Cajole you, embrace you, expose to you how
Wonderful you are
Would you own me?

Would you want to?


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Sunshine

Words will always express our feelings true.
KRJ

© Copyright 1999 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
Lost Dreamer
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1 posted 07-24-99 08:13 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Deep thoughts here, but never should someone own you. We are all individuals, we can share friendship, and love, but never should one possess it.
Delores Hall
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2 posted 07-24-99 10:34 AM       View Profile for Delores Hall   Email Delores Hall   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Delores Hall

This is something to think about.In this poem.Are you talking about yourself or are you talking about someone else owning or wanting to own you. It's a good poem and well
written.I'm just not sure on that.Well happy writing.
Sunshine
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3 posted 07-24-99 06:26 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Lost Dreamer: You are correct.

Delores: This poem came about after reading some other postings here at PiP. My readings indicate this is all some people want...to be loved so much, they lose their identity: thus, to be owned. In the very last line I had hoped to show that when someone loves themselves so little, they have nothing left for anyone TO love.

I thank you both mightily for reading, and commenting.

From your words, growth!



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KRJ 22 Jul 99
Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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