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The Last Song of Orpheus

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 07-12-99 06:31 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Who was this man
called Orpheus?
What was his power,
what meant his name?
What was his Glory?
What was his fame?

He made his fortune
by playing the lyre,
such was his skill
that his playing alone
could inspire ire
or quell a man's fear.

The beautiful Eurydice
was his lovely
young bride,
the source
of his inspiration
and constant pride.

One day,
as Orpheus
was away
and Eurydice
began to bathe,
she was spied upon
by a fighter,
not a page,
nor sultry knave.

Seeing his face
she turns to run,
fast
to escape his grasp.
Stumbling,
she falls into a pit
and is bitten
by an asp.

Homeward
Orpheus made his way,
playing a gentle tune
designed to make
the fair Eurydice,
his beloved,
swoon.

Heading to the stream
to wash the road
from his dusty flesh,
he spies a flash of color.
He holds Eurydice's dress.

Looking around,
he sees she's not there,
searching,
he comes upon the pit.
A trembling fear
grips
his suddenly hammering heart
as he looks into it.

He sees her torn
and broken body,
twisted and snakebit,
strewn across the bottom
of the bloody,
cursed pit.

A low pitched moan
erupted from him,
he lifted his lyre
and began a dirge,
A lament so powerful
and strong,
it held the forest
in thrall
as the notes
began to merge.

Halting his song,
Orpheus gathered his love
with such resolve,
he cowed even the Asp.
Holding her close,
tears
pouring from his eyes,
a plan his fevered mind
did grasp.

Dawn found Orpheus
with his eyes dry
as his heart's blood was bled.
Marshalling his courage
and steeling his resolve,
he started his journey,
to the land of the dead.

Approaching the Styx
he searched out
the great horn
to call out the ferry.
Booming out
it's lonesome moan,
the horn fit the mood
of that place,
austere,
scary.

Out of the mist
comes Charon,
the ferryman,
his voice
a grinding rasp.
"The living
have no business here,
only the dead
may pass!"

In answer
to Charon's challenge,
Orpheus did play
a song so poignant,
so clear.
Charon
bowed his head long
and thought
of his own loss
as he shed
a crystal tear.

At last,
Charon let him pass,
and begin the journey
he was coming to dread.
He stepped off the ferry
and into the tunnel
leading into Hades'
land of the dead.

He came upon Cerebrus,
three-headed guardian
of the gates of Hell.
Snarling,
he came to his feet.
"Only the dead may pass,
you know that as well!"

Orpheus' lyre
spilled out a happy,
joyful,
playful song,
Cerebrus
did not retreat.
Smiling
at the memory
of times past,
knowing his defeat,
Cerebrus
lay his heads
at Orpheus' feet.

Passing the gates,
stumbling along
in the murky gray,
the dimly lit path,
the only saving grace.
The wailing
of the tormented souls
the only music
allowed
in this dreary,
sad place.

Coming upon
great Hades' throne room,
Orpheus stopped
to steel his resolve.
Remembering Eurydice,
his reason for being,
caused the trepidation
to dissolve.

As he approached,
Hades said,
"This is no place for the living,
only the dead.
Not even for a mortal
such as you,
Orpheus,
who's heart's blood
is bled.

Why have you come
to the land of the dead?",
dread Hades demanded.
"If it is for your lover,
Eurydice,
then you leave
less than empty-handed."

His power and purpose,
confident and sure,
Orpheus began a song
brightly lit and gay,
So powerful it lifted
the agony of the dead,
lighting a place
that has never known
the light of day.

In answering peal
the dead joined his song,
as did Cerebrus
and Charon too.
Stony Hades,
shed nary a tear,
until his lady
Persephone
beckoned him near.

"Give him back his love,
I beseech you,
Hades,
my husband,
lover and Lord.
His courage and love,
overcoming
great Cerebrus,
surely deserve
some reward."

Then a single,
black tear
rolled down
Hades cheek.
"Know I do this,
not for thee.
Only and solely
for the brightness
within my dark heart,
dearest Persephone."

"Return whence you came,
leave my great hall,
to the realm of the living
she will follow,
look not behind you
or you will lose her
to your own misgiving."

Turning to go,
Orpheus thanked
Persephone
and Cerebrus
for their faith.
Charon himself
assured him
that behind him
was Eurydice's wraith.

All the trip back
to the light,
Orpheus
found the need for strength
to fight the urge
to turn
and see her.
Even knowing
that doing so
would be tantamount
to staging her murder.

At last,
Orpheus
broke out
of the darkening dim
and into
brightly lit day.
Spinning on his heels,
she's only half
out of the hole,
he cries
as she fades away.

Screaming aloud
an impotent cry
of pain and rage,
he began to play
a song,
So mighty and powerful,
the Earth heard it's call,
all the way
to Hades dark throng.

The Kraken awoke,
hearing it's call,
lashing his tail,
waves began crashing
against the sand.
Mountains rose
at his command
and against
their nature,
began gnashing
at the land.

The skies darkened
with an
approaching apocalypse
of ravening wind.
So great was his song,
the Gods
huddled in fear,
sensing
their terrible end.

Seeing what his grief
had wrought,
Orpheus
stopped
at the last note.
Even engulfed
in grief and rage,
he could not destroy
and rail against hope.

Casting himself
and his lyre
into the sea,
some say the lyre
waits
for one such as us.
One with talent and rage,
to pick up the lyre
and play the last note
of the Last Song
of Orpheus.


©1999 DreamEvil


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~one voice~
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1 posted 07-12-99 07:56 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Oh, I am left breathless... This is the reason poetry was created. You are definitely a natural. God blessed you with this talent, and you use it so very well. DreamEvil, don't you EVER believe differently.

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James
DreamEvil
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2 posted 07-12-99 08:02 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thank you, my dear, thank you very much. My masterpiece I think, so far. The first draft was lost to time. I rewrote it, as at last, I regained my rhyme.
wayoutwalt
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3 posted 07-12-99 08:12 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

woah buddy this is really good you are so knowledgable haven't heard this tale spun so well in a long time...walt
Moonlight
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4 posted 07-12-99 08:18 AM       View Profile for Moonlight   Email Moonlight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonlight's Home Page   View IP for Moonlight

You've done it again! This was really great. Great story telling and rhyme. I never knew this story before the poem Never apologize for length when its good!

~m~
Tim
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5 posted 07-12-99 10:52 AM       View Profile for Tim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tim

Bravo!
leelew
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6 posted 07-12-99 01:50 PM       View Profile for leelew   Email leelew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit leelew's Home Page   View IP for leelew

Perfect!
DreamEvil
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7 posted 07-12-99 02:11 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

My masterpiece (so far) and my gift to the forum. Thank you, everyone.
Balladeer
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8 posted 07-12-99 05:35 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

No adjective that I can think of would be worthy of this poem. As large as the vocabulary is, there are still things, or feelings that words have not yet been created to describe. That is how I feel about this poem. Aside from the fact that I am a student of mythology, you have captured the complete essense of this story in perfect detail and in a wonderful poetic display. I do not expect to see a better poem on this website, mine included. I applaud the hard work and effort that went into its creation and want you to know it was definitely worthwhile. You have represented yourself well. Thank you so much.
Andrew Scott
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9 posted 07-12-99 07:22 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

You have my deepest respect for the wonder you have laid before us. I knew of Orpheus and his ill fated journey prior to my reading, but never have I had it portraid is such vivid detail. By far one of the best offerings to be found here. Well deserving of the title "Masterpiece."
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10 posted 07-12-99 07:53 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I hung on every word...forgetting at one point that I was reading poetry, so involved was I in the story. And isn't that what great storytelling is all about? To see beyond the form - poetry or prose - is a compliment to the author! You have given us a magnificent work of art here. Thank you!
DreamEvil
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11 posted 07-12-99 09:53 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Balladeer, you blew my mind, words of praise like yours are very hard ro find.
Mr.Scott, thank you much for your clear opinion, it will influence each further, poetic decision.
Lady deVine, you know I pass the time, pining with desire for your romantic fire.

Truly this praise is my masterpiece, not the work that inspired it.
Alwye
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12 posted 07-12-99 10:21 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Well, DreamEvil, what can I say that hasn't already been so perfectly said??? This poem is phenomenal, and it truly does deserve the title of masterpiece....what a gift you possess.

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*Krista Knutson*
Gentle Soul
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13 posted 07-12-99 11:47 PM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

What can I say Dreamevil? You are the best all around.. a sweet guy, with a golden heart, an awesome thinker.. and great support.

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Gėnt£ė¤§°ū£
DreamEvil
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14 posted 07-13-99 12:39 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thank you dear. Who would think that one day the Dark would counsel the Light on purity?
IsabelleSkye
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15 posted 07-13-99 01:40 AM       View Profile for IsabelleSkye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsabelleSkye

This is so beautiful, I was at once, amazed and awed by your talent. What a great story to weave in such a poetic way. My hat is off to you my Gallant Knight.
Izzy

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Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads.....Henry David Thoreau
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16 posted 07-13-99 01:46 AM       View Profile for orpheus   Email orpheus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for orpheus

Orpheus and Eurydice. An incredible love. And you and your incredible poem. What more can I say?
DreamEvil
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17 posted 07-13-99 02:16 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Thank you dear Izzy, your praise makes me giddy with the thought of what have happened tonight.

Orpheus, I'm glad you enjoy this tale of your namesake.
tori
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18 posted 07-13-99 11:57 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Absolutely Brilliant, It took me to a place so real
I felt the bit, the loss and the rage, yet with tender love
Truly a Master Piece
"I'm thinking"
Applause, Applause, Applause!!

Only suggestion : Remove the apology for the length of this is...
Not one word too many, not one word short

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If with pen in hand my words make you think
Then I've not wasted one drop of ink.
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19 posted 07-13-99 02:04 PM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

My Dearest Dream...I am breathless still. I must agree with one voice...never ever doubt your ability. You have shown what talent is, you make me feel like a child standing next to someone who has perfected the craft here today. I bow in awe to you, my eyes filled still with tears, my breathing shallow, for I have read a piece done by one of the greats. Bravo, my friend, Bravo.

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...

Gentle Soul
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20 posted 07-13-99 05:13 PM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

Yes.. who knew? but thank you for the couseling!

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Gėnt£ė¤§°ū£


DreamEvil
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21 posted 07-13-99 05:47 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Tori, your opinion means deal, solely for who suggested it,azblond, where have you been, my inconstant friend?
Gentle Soul, read "The Bridge", iy is for you.
azblond
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22 posted 07-14-99 02:36 AM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

This Must Not Be Buried...Dream...I love this so much, I cannot get it out of my mind. Once again let me say, What a beautiful way to tell a trajic story!

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...

Cinderella
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23 posted 07-14-99 02:51 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

No apologies necessary for the length of this marvelous poem, truly a piece of work!
Kelly
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Superior, excellent, perfect etc. etc.
It was always obvious that you are a great writer but this surpasses everything else. You have really outdone yourself. I think it's too short and you should take Tori's advise and dump the apology.
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