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Unspoken Words II (With apologies to Baladeer)
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Unspoken Words II (With apologies to Baladeer) |
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Poetwheel Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 208Canada |
her: Hi there handsome, how's it going? Weathers looking poor today. (Don't go looking for your checkbook, or your visa, or your pay) him: I think the weathers gonna clear, a little sun is all it takes... (By-the-way dear jezebel, been in your car? Have you tried the brakes?) her: Perhaps your right...we should do lunch, oh wait, I made another plan... (got to cash your stocks and bonds, and book the flight to Kobe, Japan) him: No sweat my sweet, I'm busy too, figured I would mow the grass... (maybe Shirley's free today, I'd love to have that piece of ... her: As for later on, you have to fetch your supper, dear. (Theres arsenic in the vinegar and rat poison in your precious beer) him: no trouble, love, no problem here, I'll have a salad and some tea (Yahoo! Won't have to hear her nag, its fries and beer and prime t.v.) her: So, whats on you card this week? You still have bowling with good old John? (Not that I really give a crap, Miguel an I will soon be gone) him: Oh yeah! I had forgotten that, don't want to let down friendly John! (Who actually is known to me as sweet Marie LeParnagon) her: Well I should go, I'll see you soon, until then, I love you so. (At least your money, and your house, and your uncle, don't you know) him: Ok, well best of luck to you, can't wait until you're back with me (They never peel you from that car, once wrapped around a cherry tree) her & him: SUCKER! PW ------------------ Poetic Wheelbarrow http://sites.netscape.net/poetwheel |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thanks for the laugh! I think you should keep this couple around for more he/she poetry! They obviously belong together!  |
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Poetwheel Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 208Canada |
Good idea, but sadly, I think that her car ride and his dinner may spell the end... perhaps the next phone call will be from different wings of the Droverville Count Hospital?.. Thanks! PW ------------------ Poetic Wheelbarrow http://sites.netscape.net/poetwheel |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How you could take my warm, sincere, touching poem and turn it into a hilarious masterpiece is beyond me....and I love it! Thank you |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
I believe you should create a serial, throw in a shower scene where one of them dies and comes back Welsh only to discover that Wales is only a dream. I : But learn an important lesson lest some clever fellow copies your copied style and grace ( methinks that I may try, and I shall call it Patent Place ) |
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ac Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 129Cayey, PR - USA |
you know this couple too...i adored it...thanks for sharing it... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This belongs to the Community Poetry line...where we can all add on a telephone party line connection of various (dis)contented lovers. Congrats to both you and Balladeer! ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. KRJ |
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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX |
Absolutely wonderful both of you.. Nice couple.. Sounds like my ex and I though.. HUH? Have you been looking into my life again? Oh well, thank you for the hilarious piece.. Love, Lady ------------------ Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Very well orchestrated. Undoubtedly they did each other in and are headed to the same warm place in the afterlife. Perhaps their story should continue there. What could be more hellish? Thanks for a good laugh.  |
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Poetwheel Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 208Canada |
I would enjoy teaming up with Baladeer in a shared telephone conversation, as I'm sure most would. With his pen, he could make the worst of us look good! How about it B? PW ------------------ Poetic Wheelbarrow http://www.stormloader.com/poetwheel/den.html |
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