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azblond
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The Steamy Desert

0 posted 1999-07-11 05:22 AM


The Miracle of Life

She stood with her hair blowing in the wind
Watching the waves crash below
She thought of the life they did share
And the secret he’d never know

Theirs was a love like no other
Their bond stronger than life
They had known joy like no other
And life’s struggles they took in strife

Blessed with a friendship bonded in love
A beautiful union it’s true
Years that had brought them closer together
One heartbeat shared by two

The only gray cloud over their rainbow sky
Was the baby that never seemed to be
He tried to tell her it didn’t matter
But the pain in his heart she did see

So after years of praying and pleading with God
She took the matters in her own hand
She went to visit his only brother
And told him what she had planned

The consummation was over, and the miracle happened
She finally at last was with child
But when she went to him to tell him the news
He became irrationally wild

It seems he had known all along
That he could never be
A father to any, it just wouldn’t happen
So deception was all he could see

He ran from their house, and did not stop
Plunging over the cliff to the sea
Washed away like the love they had known
He died from his own misery

The miracle of an “in vitro” conception
Was the secret she never did share
His brother, the doctor, helped make it happen
Her husband died so unaware

She stood with her hair blowing in the wind
Watching the waves crash below
The affair he believed to have happened
You see…it just wasn’t so.


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Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

© Copyright 1999 MiChelle Van Vleet - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
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1 posted 1999-07-11 05:27 AM


Profound, I disagree with the last line. Who was the sperm donor, if not him? Excellent work though.

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wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
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TEXAS (it's all big)
2 posted 1999-07-11 05:31 AM


my question is the same...loved the poem tragedy
azblond
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since 1999-07-01
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The Steamy Desert
3 posted 1999-07-11 05:42 AM


Hmmm..How about this:

He too had a secret he thought she knew not
A vasectomy from years before her
His brother the one who told her of this
When she still wasn't sure

But his brother was wise that her husband one day
Would surely want a child of his own
So he froze a sample of the husbands seed
So this miracle child was his own.


How terrible of me to leave that out! So, how's that for saving face?? (Okay, a meek attempt, but thank you both for letting me see that I didn't quite clear up the whole tale!)

~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08
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Billings, MT USA
4 posted 1999-07-11 05:43 AM


Quite inspiring, azblond... completely fascinating...

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
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TEXAS (it's all big)
5 posted 1999-07-11 05:44 AM



DreamEvil
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6 posted 1999-07-11 05:47 AM


Much better and all the more tragic.

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elvira
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since 1999-07-06
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California
7 posted 1999-07-12 02:24 AM


fabulous alternate ending, you had me going at first though, i thought there had been an affair as well, so either i am gullible, or you write great poetry

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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
8 posted 1999-07-24 12:17 PM


Very well written, made my emotions spike.
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