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DreamEvil
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0 posted 07-11-99 01:38 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I don't know if this verse will work,
Nor even if it will rhyme.
I felt the need to write or go berserk,
I didn't worry about keeping time.
I read a verse from one dear to me today,
It drove a blow straight through my heart,
Felt like being abandoned by Fate,
right from the start.

She made me cry, she made my heart bleed
She filled my hollow soul with echoes of her need.
My heart clenched as my resolve wrenched,
I felt a killing lust like a thrust through my brain.
When the sorrow had passed and I could see again,
All I saw was red, everything tinted by dread.

I felt the old need welling within, climbing ever higher,
Becoming a roaring, raging bonfire.
The ecstasy of killing and the heady feel of pain
All came rushing back again.
I tried to call to see if it was true, she didn't answer
Either not home or not picking up the phone.

I wavered between misery and madness, rage and sadness
Until tonight when she came online, this more than
Anything convinced me she was fine. Now what do I do with this impotent rage of mine?


©1999 DreamEvil



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wayoutwalt
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1 posted 07-11-99 01:43 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

o i like the ending many times i have felt this thanx dream
~one voice~
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2 posted 07-11-99 01:48 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Words are wonderful outlets for rage... keep on writing... unleash the madness! Let it all out! That pain and sadness! You know I love your words. And thank you so much for your concern!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James
DreamEvil
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3 posted 07-11-99 01:55 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Quick replies are like soft, lover's sighs. I find them exhilirating. Thank you.
leelew
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4 posted 07-11-99 02:19 AM       View Profile for leelew   Email leelew   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit leelew's Home Page   View IP for leelew

So true...I'm glad I chack back here tonight..my thoughts exactly!I know that killing rage....and savour it!
Alwye
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5 posted 07-11-99 02:26 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

I don't feel this rage that often, being a mellow person, but when I do, this is how I feel. Wonderfully done, DreamEvil!



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*Krista Knutson*
azblond
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The Steamy Desert


6 posted 07-11-99 04:03 AM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

I know this one was for one voice...I see her posting has left you with the same emotions as I...the two of you have left me almost speechless today, and for me that says alot.

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Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...
DreamEvil
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7 posted 07-11-99 04:23 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Very true, all of you. She sent me to my knees.
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