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Balladeer
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0 posted 07-10-99 09:39 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Unspoken Words


She: Hey, lover! How ya doing? Just a call to say hello
( There's something I must tell you that I think you ought to know )

He: I'm doing good. Supposed to rain but otherwise I'm fine.
( It's great to hear your voice again. I wish that you were mine.)

She: We've got some rain up our way, too. It shouldn't last too long.
( I have to move on with my life although I'm not too strong )

He: Here either. By tomorrow I am sure it will be gone.
( I'd love to tell you from my heart that you're the only one )

She: I have a date tomorrow night. I haven't met him yet.
( Perhaps it is a big mistake I'm destined to regret )
But Mary thinks he's real nice and Karen likes him, too.
( But I would give all that I have if it could just be you )

He: Terrific! That sounds really good. I'm very glad for you.
( I know how much you love me but it's something you must do )
Don't stumble over your big feet if he asks you to dance!
( For I am with another and we never had the chance )

She: Don't worry about MY feet, you louse! They're smaller than YOUR feet!
( Things could have been so wonderful, had we the chance to meet )
I'm told that, on the dance floor, I'm as graceful as a swan.
( But, though I hold this love for you, my life must move along )

He: Be gentle with him, babe. You know how sharp your wit can be!
( How sad the night will be, I think, for you as well as me )
And, if you play your cards right he may ask you out again.
( I love you, babe. How differently our futures could have been! )

She: Well, that's it for tonight, old pal. A million things to do.
( Please understand the pain I feel and what I'm going through )

He: Take care and have a real good time. I'm really glad for you.


[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 07-10-99).]
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Sally S.
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1 posted 07-10-99 09:46 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Oh, why do we all avoid those unspoken words? You know, I think we'd all be a lot happier if we paid them a bit more heed.
thursdayschild
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2 posted 07-10-99 09:53 PM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

I love your poem.
(more than I can say)

Thanks for sharing.......
Poet deVine
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3 posted 07-10-99 10:17 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Me: This is truly inspired! I held my breath waiting for them to say what they were thinking!

(This is truly inspired! I held my breath waiting for them to say what they were thinking!)




[This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 07-10-99).]
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4 posted 07-10-99 10:48 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Oh, gosh, this reminds me so much of my end of phone conversations with my "someone special"-wish I could know what he thinks, if he thinks it at all...
elvira
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5 posted 07-10-99 11:02 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

i second Poet deVine's comments, life is all too short to leave feelings left unspoken, thank God i am a naturally out-spoken person, at least in affairs of the heart


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i never call a poem "nice" or such,
for that would not be saying much

DreamEvil
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6 posted 07-10-99 11:06 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Excellent!! A method I had never thought of, inspiration at it's best.

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I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say.
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Nan
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7 posted 07-10-99 11:18 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

M&M, I do believe that I now have a favorite from among your masterpieces - I could even hear the "rhythm of the falling rain" as I read it. It's beautiful....
Poetwheel
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8 posted 07-10-99 11:24 PM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

This instantly became a personal favorite after the first read! Fantastic! Please sate our thirst and write a follow up to this one! Perhaps the call after the date? Perhaps he gets the nerve up & calls her back, beeping in on a call where her original date says he can't make it... Anyhoo, excellent work!
PW

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azblond
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9 posted 07-11-99 01:14 AM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

After everyone else has let you know how wonderful this piece is...I'm afraid there aren't many words left to say...other than I enjoyed it...and am reminded once again of how much is said in words never spoken...
Cinderella
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10 posted 07-11-99 01:42 AM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

This one made me laugh from the talent you have in unusual phrasing. So different from your others, but so fantastically written! Looking forward to more humorous postings.
~one voice~
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11 posted 07-11-99 02:04 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Balladeer, how creative to use a telephone conversation... brilliant! I really enjoyed this piece. Your work has been an inspiration to me!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James
hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 07-11-99 09:03 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

How sad when we do not express those words in our hearts...I think that is where we as writers have an advantage over others....sometimes it is harder for us to not say what is on our mind than it is to say it. I have found I have to use tact at times as others do not always appreciate what I have to say
Very well written!
amhain
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13 posted 07-12-99 12:38 AM       View Profile for amhain   Email amhain   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for amhain

Sometimes the most valuable words are the most silent ones, aren't they?
Alain DeLaCendres
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14 posted 07-12-99 12:51 AM       View Profile for Alain DeLaCendres   Email Alain DeLaCendres   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alain DeLaCendres

Ouch...this one hit a little too close to home...Great poem though, I think this is something we all can undersand at one time or another. And those that don't understand may be called naive, but maybe we should call them blessed.....

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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.
sheba57
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15 posted 07-12-99 12:58 AM       View Profile for sheba57   Email sheba57   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sheba57

balladeer - truly a beautifully melancholy piece; my heart aches for both parties. you truly are a master, and i love reading your works. this style you used in the piece is very, very good. i do so enjoy your writing sir.

sheba57
ac
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16 posted 07-16-99 10:03 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

what a wonderful way to show all those things we never say...that in most cases, as all know, don't make a difference anyway...i loved the way you took that "everyday" conversation and dug around the words... that get lost in the faceless pleasantries shared with those that we love most...
ppc442
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17 posted 06-20-2002 04:46 PM       View Profile for ppc442   Email ppc442   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for ppc442

Well, you did it...you made me cry...AGAIN.
It's really been one of those days.....
cjohnson/poet2079
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Balladeer, when I saw the title, I knew it would be a great poem.  I love it; it is so me at this present time.
...unspoken words frozen in time,
like a winter season in my mind...

:crying:  


eyssence


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cjohnson/poet2079
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Balladeer, when I saw the title, I knew it would be a great poem.  I love it; it is so me at this present time.
...unspoken words frozen in time,
like a winter season in my mind...

:crying:

eyssence

*Stubby*
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20 posted 09-20-2002 09:37 AM       View Profile for *Stubby*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Stubby*

It brought a smile to my face
Thankyou    J
passing shadows
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21 posted 12-30-2002 12:53 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

mmmm, well...this I missed. but enjoyed...truth...
latearrival
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22 posted 05-19-2005 11:37 AM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

I loved this one, thanks for writing. marty
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23 posted 12-02-2006 07:47 PM       View Profile for trutodaraiders   Email trutodaraiders   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for trutodaraiders

This poem reminded me of memories I regret. Regret of unspoken words,and a love that went to another. I loved this poem.
 
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