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The Letter I Died For

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~one voice~
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0 posted 07-10-99 09:50 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for ~one voice~

(Upon suggestion, I have edited this poem. Please tell me what you think of this new version.)


I am feeling quite suspicious,
so I keep a watchful eye.
When at last I find him sleeping,
then I take the time to pry.
I search closets, I search pockets,
and his dresser drawers as well.
But I find nothing in our home
that's a secret left to tell.
It's then I take the car-keys
and I sneak out through the door.
Then, I search the glove compartment,
under the seats, along the floor...
And still I have no evidence
that will tell me I am right.
Should I really doubt my husband?
or should I ignore this fright?
Another place for me to search
makes it's way into my mind.
Should I search inside the hatch-back?
I wonder what it is I'll find...

The key opens up the hatch-back,
I've a flashlight for the hunt...
I think my man is doing drugs-
I am looking for the blunt.
And away back in the corner,
in a hidden, cozy spot,
I find what I am looking for-
it's the moment he is caught.
But much to surprise I find
it is nothing like a sack.
I can't believe what I have found-
I am taken quite aback.

The evidence is in my hand.
I do hold the proof right here.
In one second, my life changes,
but where will I go from here?
I have found a loving letter
from my very best of friends
professing her undying love
for no one else beside him!

My heart is racing so quickly.
My body is shaking too.
I can hardly read this letter
though it's something I must do.
Oh my, have I been thrown a loop...
I thought he was in to weed...
How wrong I was, how sickening-
He has been between her knees.
Now, I feel like I am dying.
I'm so angry, so despaired...
The two that meant the most to me
I now know have never cared.

What do I do? What do I say?
I am losing sanity.
My best friend was with my husband...
How could they do this to me?

I slowly make my way inside
though my movements don't seem real.
I have lost my mind completely
and I don't know how to feel.
Now, I turn the kitchen light on-
there before me lies a knife...
I reach out for it, knowing that
tonight it will take a life.

Slowly heading toward our bedroom,
as my tears begin to fall,
I will hurt him like he's hurt me-
as though I'm nothing at all.
Closer to the bed I'm creeping...
the knife glimmers in the night...
I raise it higher and higher...
with my shadow in moonlight.

I ponder at the strength I have
to bring the knife to his chest.
I marvel at the power to
bring his life to sudden death.
And as he lay there fast asleep,
one emotion comes to me...
No matter what it is he's done,
I love him,so completely.
I lower the knife and I cry,
"God, tell me what should I do?"
But my love does not awaken-
I've been taken for a fool.

I realize now that there's nothing
that will take away my pain.
I slash the knife across my wrists,
over and over, and again...
And as I lay upon the floor,
the love-letter on my chest,
he has no idea that
I am dying while he rests.
I feel my blood drain out of me
and no tear falls from my eye.
See, I know that in love with him
is the way I want to die.
In the morning, he'll awaken
to my body and this knife.
He will know that his adultery
cost him his loving, faithful wife.

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James

©~onevoice~

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Delilah
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1 posted 07-10-99 11:18 AM       View Profile for Delilah   Email Delilah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Delilah

WOW!!!! Your amazing, powerful, mindtwisting poem left me absolutely breathless! It gave me chills - I actually cried! I don't know what else to say. Miraculous.

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Delilah
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Emmy
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2 posted 07-10-99 11:31 AM       View Profile for Emmy   Email Emmy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Emmy's Home Page   View IP for Emmy

I agree with Delilah... heart-wrenching!!! The pain of this wife was almost tangible; you wove your words together so well... I know this poem will be in the back of my mind all day...
azblond
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3 posted 07-10-99 12:46 PM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

I'm still in tears, and shock, and my heart is racing a mile a minute. I was with you through ever step in this poem...the pain felt as though it was my own. One voice...this is by far one of the best pieces you have done (in my humble opinion)...it left me breathless.

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Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...
ac
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4 posted 07-10-99 01:11 PM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

I'm still mumbling my God over and over again... i could almost feel the desperation.. the heart racing and the utter anguish...
~one voice~
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Billings, MT USA


5 posted 07-10-99 01:20 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Wow! Thank you all SO much! I didn't think I would get this much feedback for this one! Thank you, thank you, thank you!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James
Kelly
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6 posted 07-10-99 01:43 PM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

I loved your poem. Incredible story and yet I've seen it played out more than once destroying many lives and many families. I felt this one very deeply. You should be proud.
Poetwheel
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7 posted 07-10-99 01:53 PM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

Great piece of work! Very emotional. Keep it up!
PW

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Alwye
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In the space between moments


8 posted 07-10-99 02:24 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Incredible piece of work..extremely intense and so sad..amazing job, one voice!

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*Krista Knutson*
elvira
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since 07-06-99
Posts 985
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9 posted 07-10-99 07:47 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

so captivating and tragic...it gave me goosebumps...without a doubt though, he was the one deserving of the knife...i often don't make it to the end of long poems...this one was different...brava!

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i never call a poem "nice" or such,
for that would not be saying much



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Aly
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10 posted 07-10-99 07:59 PM       View Profile for Aly   Email Aly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aly

Very nice! I like the last part, It was soooooooo sad! Well, hope to read more!
Poet deVine
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11 posted 07-10-99 08:05 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

If anyone ever thought poetry is a dying art, they should read this. It's timely, tragic and terrific! Well done!
tori
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12 posted 07-10-99 08:21 PM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Brilliant Work...
Check your email..

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If with pen in hand I have made you think
Than I have not wasted ink!

Tori
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13 posted 07-10-99 09:53 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Bravo, one voice!
DreamEvil
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14 posted 07-10-99 10:45 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Powerful and captivating, it drove me to my knees, crushed my heart, ignoring my pleas. Profoundly touching and wrenching. I, for one, am sorry you feel such despair.

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I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say.
DreamEvil©


Dusk Treader
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15 posted 07-10-99 10:58 PM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

Oh, this is an exquisite piece of work! I love it! It very nearly brought me to tears, excellent, moving work.

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Dusk Treader - *Abrahm* pacing the path between dark and light.

~one voice~
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Billings, MT USA


16 posted 07-11-99 12:12 AM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Once again, my friends... I amazed at the response to this poem. Thank you so very much!!!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James
orpheus
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17 posted 07-11-99 01:03 AM       View Profile for orpheus   Email orpheus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for orpheus

Breath taking...Passionate... To ~one voice~ I say one word: surrendered
Moonlight
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18 posted 07-11-99 01:12 AM       View Profile for Moonlight   Email Moonlight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonlight's Home Page   View IP for Moonlight

This is an amazing poem, it painted a picture while it told a story. Very vivid, very sad.
But a great job!

~m~
eurydice
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19 posted 07-11-99 03:50 AM       View Profile for eurydice   Email eurydice   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for eurydice

It was incredible the way you captured my eyes and my soul while I was reading your poem
wayoutwalt
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20 posted 07-11-99 03:58 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

Goodness this is a great work!
doreen peri
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21 posted 07-11-99 09:57 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

The scum! What a shame! To throw away a life over such... such.... selfish & arrogant behavior.

You sure did a good job relaying the emotions associated with such a discovery. I hope, if this is based on something real in your life, it wouldn't end this way.

A better ending for real life would be to just walk out the door to a new life leaving them to wallow in guilt.

Makes you sorta understand crimes of passion, though, huh?

Good job. dp
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22 posted 07-11-99 10:06 AM       View Profile for Ladycat   Email Ladycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ladycat's Home Page   View IP for Ladycat

Now that was deep.. In the beginning I thought about Jerry Springer and the weird topics that he has, but I loved the piece.. I can honestly say that it moved me and I showed it to my husband, Darquewing, and he loved it too..
Thank you for such a wonderful piece..
Keep on writing..

Love,
Lady


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Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured.
~one voice~
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since 07-08-99
Posts 668
Billings, MT USA


23 posted 07-11-99 04:05 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

You all don't know how lucky I think I am te receive such wonderful support! I never thought there would be this many replies! I'm speechless!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James
sheba57
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24 posted 07-11-99 11:50 PM       View Profile for sheba57   Email sheba57   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sheba57

beautifully told story! i felt every bit of what she was going through. would like to see more!
 
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