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Silent Zephyrs |
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Alain DeLaCendres Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 119Ohio |
Loud silence and belligerent ears Hear the muted violence of the wasted years. Warring zephyrs and screaming butterflies Are mingled and smeared among all the honest lies. Dim brightness surrounds the world And strangled kindness kills the girl. Wasted words echo in an endless void While tickled herds are mistakenly overjoyed. ------------------ Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie. |
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jfreak Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306Yuma, AZ, USA |
I can see that this poem has powerful undertones but I just can't grasp what they are. I have read it several times trying to figure out exactly what you are trying to say here and it just isn't coming to me. Could you please clarify this for me. The first two lines are wonderfully said. Especially "Belligerant ears". That was an awesome line. Loved it. JFreak |
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Alain DeLaCendres Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 119Ohio |
Well jfreak, this was supposed to be kind of like one big contradiction. (Examples: loud silence, muted violence, warring zephyrs, honest lies, etc..) I guess the undertone was one like this: Things are not always as they seem, but illusions sure are inviting. I tried to use positive words in contrast with negative ones (ex:warring zephyrs) to elude to that..maybe I was too vague. Thanks jfreak, sorry I was so late in geting back to your reply. ------------------ Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie. |
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