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Silent Zephyrs

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Alain DeLaCendres
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since 07-02-99
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Ohio


0 posted 07-10-99 01:56 AM       View Profile for Alain DeLaCendres   Email Alain DeLaCendres   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alain DeLaCendres

Loud silence
and belligerent ears
Hear the muted violence
of the wasted years.

Warring zephyrs
and screaming butterflies
Are mingled and smeared
among all the honest lies.

Dim brightness
surrounds the world
And strangled kindness
kills the girl.

Wasted words
echo in an endless void
While tickled herds
are mistakenly overjoyed.

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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.
© Copyright 1999 Alain DeLaCendres - All Rights Reserved
jfreak
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since 06-17-99
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Yuma, AZ, USA


1 posted 07-10-99 02:41 AM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

I can see that this poem has powerful undertones but I just can't grasp what they are. I have read it several times trying to figure out exactly what you are trying to say here and it just isn't coming to me. Could you please clarify this for me. The first two lines are wonderfully said. Especially "Belligerant ears". That was an awesome line. Loved it.

JFreak
Alain DeLaCendres
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2 posted 07-12-99 12:11 AM       View Profile for Alain DeLaCendres   Email Alain DeLaCendres   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alain DeLaCendres

Well jfreak, this was supposed to be kind of like one big contradiction. (Examples: loud silence, muted violence, warring zephyrs, honest lies, etc..)
I guess the undertone was one like this: Things are not always as they seem, but illusions sure are inviting. I tried to use positive words in contrast with negative ones (ex:warring zephyrs) to elude to that..maybe I was too vague.
Thanks jfreak, sorry I was so late in geting back to your reply.

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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.
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