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Empty Man on Narrow Ledge

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DaveS
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since 07-07-99
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Hawthorne, CA, Los Angeles


0 posted 07-09-99 07:20 PM       View Profile for DaveS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DaveS

EMPTY MAN ON NARROW LEDGE
by DaveS

On my way to challenge the sea,
I had some water thrown on me,
And, as the wind blew chill that day,
Considered, I, the misery
The future had in store for me,
And, then and there, I lost my way.

I faltered in my pace, my stride
Did break on path ten paces wide
That led down to the water's edge.
And when I reached the ocean side,
The joy I'd always known had died.
Stood empty man on narrow ledge.

There I lived, so balanced I,
With one foot wet, the other dry,
Pretending that this in-between,
Impervious to land and tide,
In false, unfailing, foolish pride,
Was where I had set out to be.

One day, the sea rose high and sent
A mighty wave, my claim to rent.
To me that wat'ry specter spoke:
"Now be ye, want ye, gladly wet,
"Or get thy sadness from my tent."
And in my heart new life awoke.

Emancipated from torment,
I cursed the ledge, and all it meant.
Immersed in rediscovered hope,
Inland, from the shore I went,
Amidst the human element,
In search of love and broader scope.
© Copyright 1999 DaveS - All Rights Reserved
Sally S.
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since 06-07-99
Posts 887
Ohio


1 posted 07-09-99 07:44 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Oh, if I could write so well. This is one of the best I've seen..really. I mean, I'm no expert....far from it I'd say....but this poem is very good. It moved so well and I envinsioned every scene. Wonderful job.
elvira
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since 07-06-99
Posts 985
California


2 posted 07-09-99 08:41 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

i have to borrow from shakespeare for my reply "one foot in sea...and one ashore...to one thing constant never" you described it most eloquently....the misery of indecision

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i never call a poem "nice" or such,
for that would not be saying much
Nan
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since 05-20-99
Posts 24426
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA


3 posted 07-10-99 05:04 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Dave this is really exceptional - and as such deserves to be front and center.

I do LOVE well-crafted poetry - You do indeed have much to say, Dave...
thursdayschild
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since 07-01-99
Posts 174
Houston, Tx.


4 posted 07-10-99 06:07 PM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

elegantly meditative, lovely ending....
"immersed in rediscovered hope"...wonderful!
aziza
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since 07-09-2006
Posts 3000
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!


5 posted 05-30-2007 10:06 PM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

I wonder if Dave S is still among the poets of PiP -- He only posted 5 times, but this poem is really good.  Wonder why he stopped posting ..

Ever Wondering Alison
 
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