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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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(For the life of me, I can't remember if this was posted or not. It's not in the history files. If I did, excuse me please....) In that forgotten part of town Where wasted hopes and dreams abound, A wrinkled man with life near end, In hopes to have at least one friend, Fashioned bits of wood and things And made a dummy run by strings. He sat alone for hours on end, Conversing with his only friend And found delight within the fact That he controlled it's every act. He told it how he never had A chance, since all his luck was bad Although he'd tried so to succeed - The dummy nodded and agreed. And how his journeys in romance Had never given him a chance, And wasn't it a crying shame That he was always held to blame When everyone knew, oh so well, That life is but a living Hell, Controlled by lust and power and greed? The dummy nodded and agreed. With patience that would rival saints, That dummy sat through all complaints And, with each little expert tug, He'd droop his head or bow or shrug And give some comfort to the man Who held his lifelines in his hand And helped to fill a lonely need When he just nodded and agreed. Senility increased with time As did the old man's phantomime, And feverish fingers pulled with glee The dummy's dance of misery. They never left each other's side Until the day both stopped and died. We found them lying, hand in hand, The dummy - and his wooden friend. |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
what can I say? you have captured a feeling that a majority of people feel, day in and day out. you are a true poet of beauty and for that I admire your words. blueloon |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Geez. There is not one that I have found to surpass your imagery. Fantastic. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. KRJ |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Your's is a level of talent I aspire towards. I could not say that I enjoyed one line more than another, for your works are always greater than the sum of their parts. By chance do you have any published books of poetry other than what one might find in the "Reader's Digest?"  That was a pretty damn good one too!P.S. Thanks for looking in on my own workings. Very much appreciated. |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
All I can say is "Wow"! |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wonderful job, Balladeer, as always. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Were I not in that part of town, That "Web" where poets' dreams abound - Responses there were just so terse, You'd not be here, better or verse. So pleasant now to have you near, My rightly friend, Dear Balladeer.  |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
What can I say, Sir Balladeer Writer of verse so dear Held by many in their hearts Makes what I write seem a fart Alicat Le Jongleur Aspirante "The Aspiring Bard" |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You are undoubtedly the greatest family I've ever had the privilege to be associated with. Thank you all! |
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DaveS New Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 5Hawthorne, CA, Los Angeles |
Really, very nice. Enjoyed thoroughly. Cool idea/theme. [This message has been edited by DaveS (edited 07-09-99).] |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I just have plum run out of adjectives my dear. You're a true inspiration for so many...I for one admire your talent more than I can say. By the way, I still think you need a publisher!!!! |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
touching.....pulling on my heart strings.....if you pardon the pun ------------------ i never call a poem "nice" or such, for that would not be saying much ;) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Amazing. I loved the little twist at the end! It is a great pleasure reading your work for I know there will be a story, a rhyme and best of all a good time!  |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
Yes, I'm one of many who adore your work. I have only been a member for 2 days, but I've been coming on often to see what's new from you. You make my poem seem like a infant spitting out her first words. By the way, what is a moderator? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The moderator's job is to make sure that everybody is happy - and that everything stays "moderate" - so if you have any questions about anything on my forums - just email - I'm not far away.... Nan  ------------------ Nan's Morsels netpoets.net/nan/index.html [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-09-99).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Balladeer...I humble in your literary presence ------------------ "Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I sit here pondering what to say to a writer who can say it all with such superb quality. Thanks for your abilities! |
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Micah New Member
since 1999-07-10
Posts 9Gainesville, TX U.S. |
I'm caught in awe over the way you express feelings through your words...Excellent!!! ------------------ Micah Senter |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Balladeer, I am so inspired by your talent! Everything you write I hold dear to my heart! ------------------ ~one voice~ For Myself, I live, Live intensely and am fed by life, and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Again, from my heart, thank you. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
To the top for Balladeer on his birthday week One of my very favorites. martyjo |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
I thought that this poem was fantastic. You have a great imagination Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It is very gratifying to have a new member find me in the archives,,,,thank you for your kind comments and welcome  |
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