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Winter Sunset - Chapter 1.

It starts early, the new day, and it's dark out.
Tingling Crisp.
Chillingly Arctic.
Strikingly Clear.
Still dark enough to
see the winter stars,
even though the moon
still casts a winterís sun.
The morning stars.
The luminescent planets look,
even to eyes in a
middle-aged person's face,
close enough to touch,
to push one star into another star,
and hear the twinkle of that pure,
crystalline sound
that all stars must make,
if we just could touch them.

As the sun rises late in the east, we prepare
Ourselves accordingly,
for checking on cattle is
More than taking a ride to the country.
Itís getting out, once there,
releasing brutally chilling locks,
sliding open stiff, ice covered gates,
slipping on the freshly frozen, icy ground,
the ground that seems like a fairyís dream
if we could take a
moment to gaze,
to watch the crystalline rainbows
as the sun
catches the hoarfrost and
transforms them into minuscule rainbows.
Don't breath in deep, it can hurt;
but watch the frost come from your face.

Day passes quickly and sunset eases over.
And over.
Quite chilled, as your bones know,
one can watch from the crest
of the swollen land, a small rise
in an otherwise seemingly flat state;
And it is quiet. Very quiet.
Until a small, tentative breeze drifts up
and moves what is left on
the cottonwood, the dry leaves, still a few
which are jostled about, brittle,
scraping, almost sounding like a squirrel
up and down the frozen bark, but not.
To the east, the sky is purple,
then lightens to a dark blue,
then a middling blue,
and on to a lighter hue, where blue
meets pink, and salmon, and a touch
of orange, meeting the last rim of yellow sun.

Donít blink. Ahh. You blinked, and blackness overcame us.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 07-09-99).]

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 07-09-99).]
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Beautiful

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Oh, this was good!!!! I wanted to put a sweater on! Loved the imagery..ground that seems like a fairy's dream...like that..
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Message to Poet - wait till you see Chapters 3 and 4.

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Sunshine

Words will always express our feelings true.
KRJ

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So how could sunshine not write about sunset? Of course, it would be beautiful!
 
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