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0 posted 07-09-99 11:30 AM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for blueloon

Intermingled Within...

I continue to stand here
searching for his voice
and though I'm growing tired
my ears still try to find him.

I took a walk looking for him
or just to empty my head.
I can't seem to find the answer
so I'll search myself within.

Seldom have I cried
these stained glass eyes
but I'd drop a tear at the
thought of him
followed closely by my laughter.

Had to hear his voice tonight
I had to have him close
to make me laugh
when Lord knows
I just wanted to empty my head.

So I continue to walk
though I am growing tired.
I had to kill the little hope I held
The hope of him breaking his drive
to see me once again.

[This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 07-10-99).]

[This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 07-10-99).]
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blueloon
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I would love some feed back on this one. I feel as if there is something missing and I can't place exactly what it is! Thank You, you guys are the greatest.
blueloon
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Blueloon, I can't find anything wrong with emotions expressed so beautifully! Don't change a thing. I love it!

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~one voice~

For Myself, I live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James
 
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