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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
Intermingled Within... I continue to stand here searching for his voice and though I'm growing tired my ears still try to find him. I took a walk looking for him or just to empty my head. I can't seem to find the answer so I'll search myself within. Seldom have I cried these stained glass eyes but I'd drop a tear at the thought of him followed closely by my laughter. Had to hear his voice tonight I had to have him close to make me laugh when Lord knows I just wanted to empty my head. So I continue to walk though I am growing tired. I had to kill the little hope I held The hope of him breaking his drive to see me once again. [This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 07-10-99).] [This message has been edited by blueloon (edited 07-10-99).] |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
I would love some feed back on this one. I feel as if there is something missing and I can't place exactly what it is! Thank You, you guys are the greatest. blueloon |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Blueloon, I can't find anything wrong with emotions expressed so beautifully! Don't change a thing. I love it!  ------------------ ~one voice~ For Myself, I live, Live intensely and am fed by life, and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James |
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