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Genea
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 321
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0 posted 1999-07-08 05:40 PM


He whispered in my ear
And I lost track of time.
He held me in his arms
And I forgot you are mine.

He looked into my eyes
I gave into romance.
I was swept away so fast
My heart never had a chance.

Often I think back
He didn’t even try
To hide his many faults
Or cover his many lies.

I was blind as a bat
I thought I knew him well
Silent as a cat creeping into my heart
When? I could not tell.

I see the real him now
I know I was wrong
To listen to his melody
And try to sing along.

© Copyright 1999 Genea - All Rights Reserved
Christina Myers
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since 1999-06-21
Posts 159

1 posted 1999-07-08 08:04 PM


I like the momentuem in this one...brings up a very good sense of betrayal... good job!

-C

Genea
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 321
USA
2 posted 1999-07-09 09:51 AM


Christina,

That is exactly what i was trying to portray in this piece...the betrayal!! So glad it came thru!

~Genea

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