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Death's Sorrow

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foxy
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0 posted 07-08-99 11:09 AM       View Profile for foxy   Email foxy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for foxy

I feel myself trembling as I hear him grow near,
too overwhelmed by the tight grip of fear,
I hear him getting closer, but I can't seem to run,
I'm the last an final stop before his job is done.
I will not go easy into the dying light,
I won't let him take me into the blackened night.
But as death's solemn gaze fell sadly to my face,
My soul was gripped with sorrow upon his cold embrace.
For the only thing death wanted was what I'd tried to flee,
Poor death was doomed to roam the earth for all eternity.
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Craig
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1 posted 07-08-99 12:05 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

I liked this a lot, it reads really well and packs a lot in so few words. Can we have more please. How about telling us how the speaker escaped death to bring us this tale?
Ain' Miss Behavin'
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2 posted 07-08-99 04:59 PM       View Profile for Ain' Miss Behavin'   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ain' Miss Behavin'

This is really well done, Foxy - I hope to read lots more of your work
Andrew Scott
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3 posted 07-08-99 06:33 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

I bow to you. Very nicely done. Your poem got me to thinking and hence, to writing... the highest compliment I can offer. Thanks for being a catalyst.
Balladeer
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4 posted 07-08-99 09:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Very nicely done,Foxy. The poem is well-constructed, concise and clear, with ending lines that make the reader think and ponder for a few moments longer after the poem has ended....always the sign of a worthy poem. Nice job!
DreamEvil
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5 posted 07-09-99 01:25 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

This piece fits my mood eloquently.

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Poet deVine
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6 posted 07-09-99 01:53 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Excellent! I never read a poem that made me feel sad for Mr. Death! This is well written. Welcome to the family! I look forward to reading more from you.
 
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