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And The Hourglass Turns

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Emmy
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0 posted 07-07-99 08:21 PM       View Profile for Emmy   Email Emmy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Emmy's Home Page   View IP for Emmy

Each tiny grain of sand
Marking the passage of time
One by one
One by one
They slowly fall
A breath, a grain of sand
A sigh, a grain of sand
A sob, a grain of sand
A laugh, a grain of sand
A moan, a grain of sand
A smile, a grain of sand
A tear, a grain of sand
And then...
A skipped heartbeat...
A moments pause...
And the hourglass turns
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Poetwheel
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1 posted 07-07-99 08:26 PM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

I like it Emmy! Very cool... To me, you didn't end it which I think is great, being a poem on time... Keep it up. PW

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Aly
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2 posted 07-07-99 09:56 PM       View Profile for Aly   Email Aly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aly

Hey girl! That wuz cool! I mean u could've done it another way, but it wouldn't of been right. Get my drift?

Emmy
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Thank you for your replies; they were very encouraging because I rarely ever write free verse poetry. But this poem came to me a while ago and I knew that I needed to write it. I'm such a structured person that sometimes it's hard to let go of rhythm and rhyme! I try though, and it's nice to hear people's comments when I do.
Andrew Scott
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4 posted 07-08-99 12:25 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Very nicely done. I liked the pace. As for free verse, I've yet to do it myself.
Thanks for looking in on "Lady Death"
mia
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5 posted 07-08-99 12:53 PM       View Profile for mia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mia

I love it... It was a succeded attempt at free verse. You've captured the second, the moment... Bravo!

(sorry about the mispelled words... English is not my first language and I'm actually just getting acquainted with a computer!!!)

I would love to read more...


Would you please comment on "ocean blue"? I tried to rhyme but somwething just isn't right...Anyways, I'll be awaiting your comments... tks.


mia

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6 posted 07-08-99 03:09 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

And how fast the hourglass turns. Well done.

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blueloon
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7 posted 07-08-99 03:20 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

i really liked your concept of time. the ending was great because it left me wondering if the hourglass turned due to a death or a change of season.
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