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armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee

0 posted 1999-07-07 02:11 PM


This is my first free verse...please tell me what you think.

i miss my bestfriend
i miss who he was
who was that?
or is he asking me the same
i am exactly as he saw me
(except for the reflection...he wanted the reflection)

i disappointed my bestfriend
he misses who i was
who was that?
it was a face....that's all

my best friend disappointed me
because he preached and preached
how life and love were all about emotions
but it was a lie...

Emotions based on physical amenities
but he's a dreamer...so its OK?

now that the cage is stripped from its beauty
only the bird remains
(which is better the bird or the cage?)

i know the answer...it came to me without a voice
there was silence
there was emptiness
there was the truth

we share something in common...my friend
we both liked each other before
which is worse
to live for the inside or the outside

i know the answer...it came to me in a tear
it's my heart that cavities MY soul...not my eyes

i miss my best friend
i miss who he was
who was that?



[This message has been edited by armanca (edited 07-10-99).]

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armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
1 posted 1999-07-07 10:24 PM


good job girl
armanca
Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
2 posted 1999-07-07 10:25 PM


good job girl
thursdayschild
Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169
Houston, Tx.
3 posted 1999-07-08 11:13 PM


armanaca, this is a good poem. I loved your
analogy of the bird (the soul) and it's
cage (appearances)...Which is better?
Hhhmmmm....give me the beautiful wings!
Thanks for posting this.

jennyanydots
Junior Member
since 1999-07-09
Posts 15

4 posted 1999-07-09 10:24 PM


Armanca...If you don't mind me asking what is this poem referring to? I enjoyed it though...i also like the bird-cage part.



armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
5 posted 1999-07-09 10:28 PM


Jennyanydots...this poems is actually about a friendship made online. This person became my bestfriend of sorts (someone i confided in) I met him online and after a month or so i finally sent a picture...and well he decided we weren't such good friends after that.
armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
6 posted 1999-07-09 10:31 PM


ok... please don't laugh at me. (about the post thing) I'm new here and i tried it on myself first....i didn't know everyone could read it. OOPS...hehe
armanca
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 211
Tennessee
7 posted 1999-07-09 10:33 PM


Thank you thursdayschild and jennyanydots

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