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They Should Invent Smokeless Cigarettes....

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Alain DeLaCendres
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since 07-02-99
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0 posted 07-06-99 11:30 PM       View Profile for Alain DeLaCendres   Email Alain DeLaCendres   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alain DeLaCendres

The smoke from my "stress reliever"
plays about my pen
then floats up, and up, and up...
until it's gone-
just like you.

Sometimes the white smoke
plays tricks with me
(or maybe it's just my imagination)
and forms little images of you
that smile at me-then just disappear.

If this keeps up
I won't be able
to call them "stress relievers"
much longer-
soon I'll be calling them "reminders".

I have to quit.........

2:32am / 7-5-99

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Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie.
© Copyright 1999 Alain DeLaCendres - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 07-06-99 11:33 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Very, very clever and imaginative to create a poem from that thought. Nicely done!
thursdayschild
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since 07-01-99
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2 posted 07-07-99 12:19 AM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

Love this analogy! It's so true, a lost love
is like a cigarette...the burning, then the smoke, and (yuck) ash.... Great poem!
doreen peri
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3 posted 07-07-99 08:12 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Bravo! Loved it!
Sunshine
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4 posted 07-07-99 03:59 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Well done Alain.

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Sunshine

Words will always express our feelings true.
KRJ

Andrew Scott
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5 posted 07-07-99 07:09 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Very unique. I like the possible double meaning with the last line. Nice work.
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