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Primal Error

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Angela K. Dyson
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Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada


0 posted 07-06-99 07:35 PM       View Profile for Angela K. Dyson   Email Angela K. Dyson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angela K. Dyson

This is a poem I posted in the old forum, but I've added a couple of stanzas since then, so here it is:

Fermented barely and aged crushed grapes
Mingle with soupy blood inside of our veins,
Creating within us a raw liquid desire
Seemingly impossible for us to restrain

Stark black bursts forth after bulbs are broken
By our hungry hands, that frantically explore
And tear at each other's constricting garments,
Revealing newfound terrain of glistening contours

Our moist lips pucker and leave their token,
Crisp violet blotches on smooth white skin
Shaking fingers run through knotted hair,
Further dizzying our heads from realizing our sin

In the heat of the night, we twist and we turn,
Amidst choruses of our own deafening cries
Sweaty film on our skin provides a slick pleasure,
And through encouraging moans, we remain energized

Our bodies convulse as one, in pure primal rapture,
Not setting value upon the act taking place,
Simply taking pride in our primitive drive --
Oh forgive us, oh Lord, the whole human race!

Then by the first light of dawn, we awake so unsure
Of events taken place just hours before
With drumming brains we greet the new day,
But the one laying alongside is shamefully ignored

With heads no longer spinning, we now come to see
The danger in which we've placed both of our lives --
Not knowing each other, or where we've both been,
We realize it's a gamble, just to survive

Will death arrive in a brightly-wrapped package,
And unfold its cruel gift with slow-staggering strife?
Anxiety takes hold with the sudden realization
That to be feared much like death is the chance of new life

New life based on love is a beautiful thing,
A miracle beyond words like the gift of the sun
But life brought on by the bottle is an unraveling string,
Frayed long before it has even begun

Dear Lord, if I must choose between one or the other,
Strike me down with an illness beyond repair
So that my mistakes won't be paid by another,
Who's fate has been tolled before given the chance to dare

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Talia
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1 posted 07-06-99 07:58 PM       View Profile for Talia   Email Talia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Talia

I'm very moved. You've painted a beautiful picture of a good natured person.
Nan
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2 posted 07-06-99 08:52 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Nice to have you here, Angela
...and I like the additions to the poem.
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