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Genea
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since 1999-06-15
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0 posted 1999-07-06 12:26 PM


A piece of your mind and none of your heart
That's all you gave me right from the start.
I should have ignored you, instead I hung around
Thinking you'd love me, I was spellbound.

One day I saw clouds and knew there’d be rain
But did not imagine there’d be so much pain.
Pain fell upon me one drop at a time
Flooding my life, no sun would shine.

I stood in a puddle with my feet soaking wet.
Your stinging words I’d never forget.
And to think it all started with one drop of pain
Changing my life so it’s never been the same.

© Copyright 1999 Genea - All Rights Reserved
Lil Angel
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since 1999-07-03
Posts 21

1 posted 1999-07-06 12:33 PM


wow....powerful poem...nicely done...
Genea
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2 posted 1999-07-06 12:44 PM


thanks and welcome to Open Poetry!

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

3 posted 1999-07-06 01:34 AM


Very nice job, expresses some of the same sentiment I feel.

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hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 1999-07-06 08:42 AM


A moving piece, like the subject matter, think we have all been there at one point or another
Genea
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5 posted 1999-07-06 09:17 AM


Dream,

Thanks and glad u found a connection with it. As background....it was raining when i wrote this. I find it easy to write in the rain. There is so much to experience if you open urself up to it.
~Genea

Genea
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since 1999-06-15
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6 posted 1999-07-06 09:42 AM


hoot,
thanks for reading. I try to write poetry that reflects life around me and if someone else can relate, GREAT!
~Genea

ac
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since 1999-06-17
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Cayey, PR - USA
7 posted 1999-07-06 05:56 PM


it's a wonderful poem...it's just a shame i've been able live it...a couple of times too many...
yumna
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since 1999-07-02
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alexandria.egypt
8 posted 1999-07-06 06:35 PM


a touching poem. very good
Genea
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 321
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9 posted 1999-07-06 06:43 PM


ac,
i am sorry too, that u have experienced it, especially more than once. Here's hoping it does not happen again!

yumna,
thanks!

~Genea

[This message has been edited by Genea (edited 07-06-99).]

[This message has been edited by Genea (edited 07-08-99).]

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