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Innocent Lives

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Lil Angel
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0 posted 07-06-99 12:21 AM       View Profile for Lil Angel   Email Lil Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lil Angel

Little lives taken away, babies gone and there was nothing they could say.Fear they felt and pain inside for they didn't know why someone would want to take their lives.Here but a short time, done nothing wrong commited no crime.Trying their best to stay alive because for some heartless reason nobody seems to care if they die.Struggling to see where all the care has gone,fighting to understand where things went wrong.Wanting to breath yet another day but not sure they will without it being taken away.No understanding for what they're put through,answer this question for me how much harm can an innocent child possibly do you?Stop and look into their eyes,then you will finally hear the baby cry.
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Enrique
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1 posted 07-06-99 12:27 AM       View Profile for Enrique   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enrique

Very touching...Would love to read more.
Lil Angel
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2 posted 07-06-99 12:30 AM       View Profile for Lil Angel   Email Lil Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lil Angel

well thank you...nothing compared to your poetry....
Genea
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3 posted 07-06-99 09:40 AM       View Profile for Genea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Genea

is this about abortion? or refugee children? You make a good point, either way.

One suggestion, maybe it is just me, but i find it hard to read a poem that is written in a paragraph....it would flow better for the reader if it was written out 'vertically'

Example:
Little lives taken away,
Babies gone and there was nothing they could say.
etc.

You can decide where to put the breaks.

~Genea
Lil Angel
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4 posted 07-06-99 11:59 PM       View Profile for Lil Angel   Email Lil Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lil Angel

I will try to write my poems the way you said...itz about sorta both...abortion and refugee children...hope that makes sense...thanks for replying to my poem...
 
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