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Respite From the Night

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Tim
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0 posted 07-05-99 09:42 PM       View Profile for Tim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tim

Seeking respite from the night
No more to dance in pain's delight
She builds a fortress in her soul
So o'er the night she has control
Within her walls her heart does hide
Begone the pain, she has decried
So now she sings her sad laments
No way to breech her battlements.

I sing to her love's madrigal
Her beauty does my heart enthrall
I come to her in still of night
As moth to flame, yearn love's delight
I touch upon her satin skin
Seeking out her heart within
You are my love, to her decree
I ask her hand on bended knee.

I build a fortress in my soul
So o'er the night, I have control.


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DreamEvil
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1 posted 07-05-99 09:59 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Fantastic slice of Darkness, beautifully soulful.

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Poet deVine
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2 posted 07-05-99 10:01 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

After awhile, it's hard to know what to say when a truly great poem is posted. For this poem, I'm speechless. Beyond great!
Balladeer
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3 posted 07-05-99 10:35 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I agree. Brilliant, Tim!
Enrique
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4 posted 07-06-99 12:19 AM       View Profile for Enrique   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enrique

Nicely done.
Lil Angel
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5 posted 07-06-99 12:27 AM       View Profile for Lil Angel   Email Lil Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lil Angel

wow....wow is all I have to say...that was excellently done...
thursdayschild
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6 posted 07-06-99 02:33 AM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

Impressive. Wonderful
use of rhyme. Lovely and lyrical work.
azblond
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7 posted 07-06-99 02:37 AM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

Sigh and be still...your words have said enough. I thank you for allowing me the journey.

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Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...
hoot_owl_rn
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wonderful rythym and rhyme.
great peom
Tim
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9 posted 07-06-99 03:50 PM       View Profile for Tim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tim

Thank you all for your very gracious comments.
Sunshine
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10 posted 07-06-99 04:59 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Well done.

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Nan
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11 posted 07-06-99 08:55 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I think I should start submitting my poems to you for critique....


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