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the moment that i died

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amber
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los banos, ca,


0 posted 07-05-99 08:31 PM       View Profile for amber   Email amber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for amber

i savored a sweetness,
that would sour over time,
searching for a love that was to hard to find,
in your eyes....i died.

i captured a weakness,
by letting you in,
paying with my soul,
embraced by your sin,
it was all.......simple then.

i attracted your shallowness,
with my vulnerable attitude,
you consumed my eagerness,
making me love you,
regretfully........its through.

you were proned to my insecurities,
my foolishness i didnt see,
no longer can i lie,
in you..........i died.


© Copyright 1999 amber jean white - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 07-05-99 08:47 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wonderfully powerful with a flow that dances you around in circles and leaves you gasphing for breath. Well, well written!!!
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2 posted 07-05-99 10:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

very concise and emotional....well written
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3 posted 07-06-99 08:30 PM       View Profile for amber   Email amber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amber

Thank you both very much i appreciate your thoughts, and hope you enjoy my writing. Thanks agian!
 
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