Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
ashlerr, this is a beautiful poem. It is precise, meaningful and clear. It is not enough to have the words. The proper vehicle, or form, is also extremely important. Some poems fare better in a rhymed form, some in free verse, some in sonnets, etc etc etc. I have found that, for myself, the poem will often dictate how it wants to be written. It appears that is what happened to you. The words and the thoughts behind the words demanded free verse and so that was the only choice...and the right choice it was. Any other form may have cheapened it or lessend its impact. Our duty is not to rhyme - our duty is to display our thoughts in the best manner possible. You have certainly accomplished that. Well done!