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Bunnie45
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since 1999-07-03
Posts 13
bedford

0 posted 1999-07-04 10:30 PM


You say the words I would want to hear
But the words I hear are not the same
Behind the vocie I hear them say
It's never going to be that way

You have not known love this I know
No hand to hold you close like mine
No whisper of words in your ear
The little words that you hold dear

You blindly follow a heartless love
Left behind is a vacant heart
No matter what I want to say
It's never going to be that way

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Pam Smith

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jfreak
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since 1999-06-17
Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA
1 posted 1999-07-05 04:38 AM


I love the rhyme scheme. The way the first two lines in the each stanza do not rhyme but the last two do. That is pretty cool. It makes for a different rhythm which flows beautifully.
I like the second stanza. What you say is so true about relationships in general. We don't always know how that other person totally feels. Usually one person always feels a little more than the other.
Great poem.

Jfreak

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