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Tangled

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MuseFaire
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0 posted 07-04-99 06:13 PM       View Profile for MuseFaire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MuseFaire

It's pale and complicated
in the light behind your eyes
and I feel as if I'm losing the ground
between the heaven and earth of us
too confused by the plight of my heart-
AndwhereamIinsideofthis?
stuck- out of time-floating inside too many feelings
feelings that drench me outward towards the edge
and grab at the hidden truth in me;

the silence of your eyes
begins with the loudness of my heart
and I am shook to the core of all that I am
running from the pull of your smile
the charm of your face
the beauty I see in your eyes.

And everything is this:
a desire so strong it eats at my will
a need so great it breaks us in two

But the friendship you give
can guide us through all of this
and give us a ground to stand on-

So hope is the silence that blooms in my heart
and goodbye is the freedom
I offer you now.
© Copyright 1999 MuseFaire - All Rights Reserved
Genea
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since 06-15-99
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1 posted 07-04-99 11:24 PM       View Profile for Genea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Genea

i liked ur technique of running all the words in that one line together. effective!
thursdayschild
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2 posted 07-05-99 01:56 AM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

Beautiful poem. Love the lines "the silence
of your eyes/begins with the loudness of
my heart" Truly speaks to this soul.
Thanks for sharing this great work!
 
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