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Genea
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0 posted 1999-07-04 12:32 PM


There’s nothing more between us, no not anymore.
Last night I heard your key, for the last time in the door.
We both knew sooner or not, we’d come to a parting of ways.
We knew our relationship had seen much better days.

Every time we were together, I fell in love with you.
Every time you said you loved me, I knew it wasn’t true.
I hope you get everything, I seemed to get from you:
Grey days, black sleepless nights, a cold lifeless moon.

And a crayon –

To color your world blue, so it looks just like mine.
A world with clouds, where the sun never shines.
A blue crayon to fill in those pages of grey
Washed out by tears that never go away.

All colors in my life, now replace shades of blue.
I’m creating a rainbow, a life without you.
My pages of grey, are washed out by my tears
All gone forever, along with my fears.

© Copyright 1999 Genea - All Rights Reserved
Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
1 posted 1999-07-04 12:36 PM


Beautifully written! I hope your rainbow reaches new dimensions.
Genea
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2 posted 1999-07-04 12:52 PM


Thanks! My rainbow did...a few years ago...this is an older poem of mine.
MuseFaire
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since 1999-06-27
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3 posted 1999-07-04 06:06 PM


a simple thing- a blue crayon. A powerful poem. Excellent.


-the muse-

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"Thought is the greatest of pleasures..." - Gustave Flaubert

Genea
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4 posted 1999-07-04 11:26 PM


Muse, thank you, for responding. I used the color blue for more than one reason...one is that it is my fav color. And it can be related to a variety of emotions and feelings.

~Genea

Alwye
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In the space between moments
5 posted 1999-07-04 11:49 PM


many people write poems about lost love and the like, but few write them with such originality. I praise you on a job extremely well done.

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*Krista Knutson*

Bunnie45
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bedford
6 posted 1999-07-04 11:51 PM


Your poem I really enjoyed it
Genea
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7 posted 1999-07-04 11:55 PM


alywe,

thank u for ur kind words about my poem. Sometimes when u stick ur neck out with a poem, u wonder if u r the only person in the world, having those thoughts.

~Genea

Genea
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8 posted 1999-07-05 12:08 PM


Bunni, glad u enjoyed reading it... i enjoyed writing it.
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