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Open Poetry #1

Crushed Blind

Christina Myers
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since 1999-06-21

Posts 159

0 posted 1999-07-04 10:31 AM

Sometimes
the way you look at me
catches my heart in my throat
and I choke to turn away-
the power of your gaze is too strong for my eyes
and my heart races
to keep up with the thoughts in my head
and I turn to you and your hands
and I wonder- what is it about you
I can't seem to get enough of?

A desire so strong overwhelms me
that it chokes at the heart of me
and I push your face out of my way- out of my mind
yet, the traces linger still...
and I am running from the pull of your smile
the charm of your eyes
as they flash at me
daring me to reach out and touch you...

Crushed and
twisting
and turned around
I blind myself
to keep myself away-
away
from the sight of you.

[This message has been edited by Christina Myers (edited 07-04-99).]

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

1 posted 1999-07-04 12:14 PM

excellent! very intense, and moving.

Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

2 posted 1999-07-05 02:06 AM

I hope I'm not joking here, but this is a poem of madness between two eyes - a war of eyes, a war of desires, or a war of incognito, or a war of avoidance on your part. IMHO.

Christina Myers
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since 1999-06-21

Posts 159

3 posted 1999-07-05 08:18 AM

Huh?

I mean, I know it's not that good...but still...

Artur Hawkwing
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since 1999-06-30

Posts 444
USA

4 posted 1999-07-05 12:43 PM

The thought never popped in my head that this wasn't a good one... actually I think this is a really good one. Your writings have a passion in them, and sometimes I try criticizing poems, to see if I got the idea right, but sometimes I'm such a terrible critic. I'm sorry....

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 1999-07-05 06:27 PM

Believe me, it IS a good one. I've faced those same inner struggles and you describe them excellently.

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