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how bad is my poem?

Richard A
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since 1999-07-04

Posts 1
Sacramento, CA United States

0 posted 1999-07-04 07:21 AM

Once Again
by Richard Aragon - 1999

Since the day we met i felt an attraction towards you. For a
year and a half I kept my feelings bottled inside for fear that you
didn't feel the same way.

For a year and a half I would sit there and dream of how wonderful
it would be if you somehow developed feelings for me.

Then one day my dream came true, I found out that you felt the same
way about me as I felt about you. I couldn't believe it it was a
wish come true.

I tried hard to be everything you wanted and to show you that i cared,
but at some point, I don't remember exactly when we drifted apart and
our relationship came to an end.

Now i'm in that familiar situation once again, i'm once again sitting
and thinking of how great it would be if you once again developed
feelings for me.

And once again you have no clue that I have these feelings for you.
I want to tell you oh so much but once again i'm afraid you won't feel
the same way I do.

So once again I sit here dreaming of you, I hope and pray that i'll
finally get the courage to once again tell you how i feel.

I hope that one day i'll be able to go up to you and say.....

I Love You

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Richard Aragon

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since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
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1 posted 1999-07-04 10:07 AM

Welcome to the family! As you will discover, there are many poets here who's style is as different as their UserName. Your poem has a depth of feeling that shows in every line.

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