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Fred Hobbs
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0 posted 1999-07-03 08:51 PM


Diana

The storm roared in as darkness fell
And cold winds shrieked like fiends from hell
For the warmth of her my soul I'd sell
But no one's buying, just as well
Dear God, I am so lonely

Throughout the night the cabin creaked
Until the storm at midnight peaked
And banged the shutters 'til they leaked
Then icy fingers through them sneaked
And snow blew in my kitchen

The snow I gather in a pot
Then on the stove for water hot
To make some stew from game I'd caught
And dream of her whom I have not
To dream of sweet Diana

Although her name brings me remorse
Her mem’ry comes with wondrous force
My only joy, she was the source
But never was she mine of course
For Heaven took her early

She died some twenty years ago
Alone in darkness, drenched with snow
She’d asked me to her home, but no
Said through that storm I would not go
To her the storm meant nothing

She lost her way that soulless night
All blinded in the swirling white
And wearied by the wint’ry bite
She stopped to rest, too weak to fight
An Angel came to claim her

I know this now, I’ve known it long
She was my heaven, was my song
My life without her,life gone wrong
Oh Lord, I am so lonely

(a revised repost)


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1 posted 1999-07-03 09:00 PM


You've got it all, Fred. The rhyme, the rhythm, the tempo, the mood, the story. Excellent, as always.
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2 posted 1999-08-14 10:58 AM


Fred! Why didn't I see this one before? Did it get lost in the patriotic poetry of the 4th of July? Anyway, here it is, a found treasure. Wonderful poem. TGTBATB

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3 posted 1999-08-14 11:02 AM


I can feel the lonely... great job!
Sally S.
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4 posted 1999-08-14 04:53 PM


Fred..this is wonderful and Ms. deVine was right when she refered to this as a "found treasure" I'm going to have to go back a few pages once again myself.
Artur Hawkwing
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5 posted 1999-08-14 05:41 PM


Fred~ I liked this a lot, it is an excellent poem of winternight. My mind speaking as it reads... "dark, gloomy feeling...the arctic winds blowing...wintry non-solace...come out, sunlight...melt the snow...white all around...the snowstorm...Diana...wandering lost...the snow angel...winternight..." This is a tragedy but a masterpiece nonetheless.
Fred Hobbs
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6 posted 1999-08-14 07:45 PM


Thanks everyone for the favorable comments. And special thanks to you Poet for rescuing Diana from the frozen wasteland of the back page. But she had some fine poetry back there to keep her company.

sandman

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7 posted 1999-08-14 10:36 PM


I could read this a hundred times and enjoy it equally as much each time....
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