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Red Letter Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 85Allentown, PA |
Twenty-six All those decisions I made somehow ended up right here, tangled into pockets of lint and receipts and closed fists (right and wrong stayed a novelty unapplied, the formula freedom I won't understand) While I faltered, amassing psyche, collecting amusements as fair play, you went on living without me. I was numb for a time gathering my pennies, blowing out candles and rhyming wishes into blackness, waiting for the stars to see me as worthy - until even the heavens denied me it's table scraps unless I refused my own restlessness - I don't know how to return to where you are; it's always been me crossing borders, wondering when the casualties would finally wash ashore - I couldn't simply accept it all without feeling compromised but I never thought that I'd win somehow or end up with a quarter century unsettled, swirling around me... so close I can still feel it's breath. |
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Haskins Member
since 1999-06-26
Posts 85Dallas, TX |
"collecting amusements as fair play" "rhyming wishes into blackness" This is very skillful use of language. It enhances the sincerity of the feeling behind it. ------------------ William Haskins AKA The Mad Monk http://www.ionstorm.com/public/haskins/inner_sanctum.htm |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well constructed and beautifully presented, just like its authoress. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Your life, so known to me, and so aptly presented here. You have captured the essence of your past few years and presented in such a way that brings a tear to mine eyes and a deep, grating pain to my heart. If I did not know you, this poem would tear me just as deeply... My god woman, I love you more now than ever before. [This message has been edited by JP (edited 07-03-99).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I see that your quill's a'rill again - Boy am I glad to see that. We can't be giving you too many sabbaticals here, girl...  Meet my friends - The Menage [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-03-99).] |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
A very touching look inside you Red. I wish I'd the presence of mind to write things down when I was 26. Nice work. Thanks for sharing it. sandman |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
Wow! This is true art. Great poem, deeply felt. |
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Red Letter Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 85Allentown, PA |
I posted this and left for a while... When I returned, all these wonderful words of praise to my meager ramblings - Thank you, all - it is you who inspire me to scream out my pain through words on a screen. Knowing that my poetry has touched someone makes the vulnerabilities in allowing others to see the wounds I've gained in my life all worth it... P.S. JP, your words touched me the deepest, as they always seem to do. No matter where my life takes me, you will always have my heart... |
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