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Twenty-six

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Red Letter
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0 posted 07-02-99 11:16 PM       View Profile for Red Letter   Email Red Letter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Red Letter

Twenty-six

All those decisions I made
somehow ended up right here,
tangled into pockets of lint and receipts
and closed fists
(right and wrong stayed a novelty unapplied,
the formula freedom I won't understand)

While I faltered, amassing psyche,
collecting amusements as fair play,
you went on living without me.

I was numb for a time gathering my pennies,
blowing out candles and rhyming wishes into blackness,
waiting for the stars to see me as worthy -
until even the heavens denied me it's table scraps
unless I refused my own restlessness -

I don't know how to return to where you are;
it's always been me crossing borders,
wondering when the casualties would finally wash ashore -
I couldn't simply accept it all without feeling compromised
but I never thought that I'd win somehow
or end up with a quarter century unsettled, swirling around me...
so close I can still feel it's breath.
© Copyright 1999 Red Letter - All Rights Reserved
Haskins
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1 posted 07-02-99 11:21 PM       View Profile for Haskins   Email Haskins   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Haskins's Home Page   View IP for Haskins

"collecting amusements as fair play"
"rhyming wishes into blackness"

This is very skillful use of language.
It enhances the sincerity of the feeling behind it.



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Balladeer
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2 posted 07-02-99 11:31 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well constructed and beautifully presented, just like its authoress.
JP
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3 posted 07-03-99 01:48 AM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Your life, so known to me, and so aptly presented here. You have captured the essence of your past few years and presented in such a way that brings a tear to mine eyes and a deep, grating pain to my heart.

If I did not know you, this poem would tear me just as deeply... My god woman, I love you more now than ever before.

[This message has been edited by JP (edited 07-03-99).]
Nan
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4 posted 07-03-99 08:15 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I see that your quill's a'rill again - Boy am I glad to see that. We can't be giving you too many sabbaticals here, girl...

Meet my friends - The Menage

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-03-99).]
Fred Hobbs
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5 posted 07-03-99 07:28 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

A very touching look inside you Red. I wish I'd the presence of mind to write things down when I was 26. Nice work. Thanks for sharing it.

sandman
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6 posted 07-03-99 08:47 PM       View Profile for thursdayschild   Email thursdayschild   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for thursdayschild

Wow! This is true art. Great poem, deeply
felt.
Red Letter
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7 posted 07-07-99 05:48 PM       View Profile for Red Letter   Email Red Letter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Red Letter

I posted this and left for a while...

When I returned, all these wonderful words of praise to my meager ramblings - Thank you, all - it is you who inspire me to scream out my pain through words on a screen. Knowing that my poetry has touched someone makes the vulnerabilities in allowing others to see the wounds I've gained in my life all worth it...

P.S. JP, your words touched me the deepest, as they always seem to do. No matter where my life takes me, you will always have my heart...
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