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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley


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I sit alone and write my tale
of love gone wrong somehow
a storm is gathering along the horizon
and I can feel it inside me now.

The tears I shed are mostly dried
and the pain has lessened some
I stare out the window at darkening clouds
and beg for the storm to come.

Take away my anger and shame
wash away my tears of sorrow
give me something fresh in my life
give me hope for a new tomorrow.




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Balladeer
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1 posted 07-02-99 11:15 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Drawing a parallel between the storm and your inner feelings is very well thought out. Nicely done.
ac
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2 posted 07-03-99 11:03 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

During the more difficult moments of my life it's always felt like a storm brewing just inside me...thanks for putting it into words so precisely...
azblond
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3 posted 07-03-99 11:42 AM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

Isn't it somehow strange that though we often fear the storm it is what brings the new beginnings.....your poem captured this reality wonderfully..."For when the sun breaks free, I can finally see..." (the line of one of my own on the same subject.)

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Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...
Craig
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4 posted 07-03-99 02:01 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

To catch a fleeting thought and tie it to a storm to convey the power of feelings at that moment was inspirational. (The fact that thunder was actually rolling over my head as I read this work made the impact even more clear )

Feel the rumble hear the roar
of thunder at your minds door
I read the power in your pain
your words will forever reign
JuLiEt
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5 posted 07-03-99 02:11 PM       View Profile for JuLiEt   Email JuLiEt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JuLiEt's Home Page   View IP for JuLiEt

Wonderful poem!!! It moved me so much I felt like crying. Your poems are beautifully written.And I look forward to reading more.

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~*JuLiEt*~
yumna
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6 posted 07-03-99 07:01 PM       View Profile for yumna   Email yumna   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for yumna

A touching poem,I simply loved it . keep up the good work .
Poet deVine
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7 posted 07-03-99 07:27 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Thank you all for your kind comments. They are much appreciated always.
gypsylace
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8 posted 07-04-99 03:01 AM       View Profile for gypsylace   Email gypsylace   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit gypsylace's Home Page   View IP for gypsylace

Hi! I really loved this poem. Short and to the point, and yet nothing is lacking in depth. My sister who is also a writer told me once "you shouldn't have to explain the poem, it should explain itself". I really could not only understand what you were saying, but could also feel what you were saying. Thankyou for sharing.
Kelly
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Perfect!
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


10 posted 06-19-2000 01:56 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I had missed this one...thank goodness Ron brought the archives back!  I liked this one a lot...I think 'Deer was on target in his comment...

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

linda munday
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Stormy heart... what a great idea.  I wish I had thought of it.
It must be from Linda M.
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this sounds like something I'd write

good piece!
 
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