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Franni
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since 1999-07-02
Posts 39


0 posted 1999-07-02 10:19 PM


Your portrait belongs in my hallway
In line with my father
In his beaver top hat,
Brocaded vest and frock coat,
Holding his gold Dubie pocket watch
Looking prosperous,
Before he lost the mine at Silverton.

Your portrait belongs in my hallway
Beside my mother in
The chestnut oval frame.
She looks like me in brown taffeta,
Her hoop skirt allowing a glimpse of
Her gold kid high button dancing shoes,
Worn the day she had the stroke
And lost the use of her legs.

She is holding a book she read to me
About a prince in a fairy tale
And I want her to know
You did come riding by
So late...
But you came.

Your portrait belongs in my hallway
Next to mine
So all will someday see
How the flash caught you
Caught me
Smiling like Sunday's children
Suspended in a time
When we were all winning.

© Copyright 1999 Franni - All Rights Reserved
JANNA
Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 51
arlington, tx usa
1 posted 1999-07-02 10:26 PM


Very emotional and sweet! I really like this one, I can't wait to read more.
Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
2 posted 1999-07-02 10:29 PM


Franni - We are truly honored that you've joined us...
This poem is extremely well written and exudes love and sincerity. - I, in particular, am looking forward to seeing lots more of your work...
Wecome Aboard!!


[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-02-99).]

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
3 posted 1999-07-02 10:35 PM


Welcome to the family! This poem feels like it should be printed on parchment paper, framed and hung in that same hallway! And your story has a moral - someday your prince will come - even if you have to wait a bit for him!

Red Letter
Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 85
Allentown, PA
4 posted 1999-07-02 11:28 PM


The last two stanzas really tied things up nicely ... Very sweet.

Red

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