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For E'er a Mortal Be

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Mike
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0 posted 07-02-99 06:42 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

Doth not thee feel fair Rose, enchanted love
Within mine breast as welkin charms divine?
When'st thou appears, mine goddess from above
Thy ethereal bloom doth me entwine
Thou hast assailed in quest adamantine
Against mine inner walls; breached battlements
To set me free, release love's quarantine
For in thy passions deep, my soul relents
Bequeathing everlastingly to thee
Eternal love, and now to thee belong
I shall for e'er yearn my Aphrodite
As in mine heart I sing Aglaia's song
Dost thou love me, as wholly I do thee
Or in thine eyes, shall e'er a mortal be?
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1 posted 08-14-99 10:54 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is good! Feels very 'Shakespearean' to me...TGTBATB
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I imagine thee as a 'victorian lover' Mike..

Good job.

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr

Artur Hawkwing
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3 posted 08-18-99 12:17 AM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

I loved Shakespeare's works with an intense passion. This is a truly delightful piece written by another attempting the style that was used back then. I can understand it as if it were second nature to me, because I understand Shakespearean language better than the modern written word. I love this eloquent piece!
Alwye
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4 posted 08-18-99 12:24 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

I also love Shakespeare, although I'm just starting to get into it...this was a beautiful beautiful piece.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

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Nan
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I certainly am glad someone's out there pulling up some of the good poems I missed while I was teaching last month....
Your Shakespearean rhyme scheme is nicely intact - just a tuck here and there on your iambics, and you're looking at perfection....

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Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done:
For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits,
Than I am sure I have in my whole five.
~ 1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75


 
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