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For E'er a Mortal Be
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For E'er a Mortal Be |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Doth not thee feel fair Rose, enchanted love Within mine breast as welkin charms divine? When'st thou appears, mine goddess from above Thy ethereal bloom doth me entwine Thou hast assailed in quest adamantine Against mine inner walls; breached battlements To set me free, release love's quarantine For in thy passions deep, my soul relents Bequeathing everlastingly to thee Eternal love, and now to thee belong I shall for e'er yearn my Aphrodite As in mine heart I sing Aglaia's song Dost thou love me, as wholly I do thee Or in thine eyes, shall e'er a mortal be? |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is good! Feels very 'Shakespearean' to me...TGTBATB  |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
I imagine thee as a 'victorian lover' Mike..  Good job. ------------------ "No one was ever ruined from without; The final ruin comes from within." Amelia E. Barr |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
I loved Shakespeare's works with an intense passion. This is a truly delightful piece written by another attempting the style that was used back then. I can understand it as if it were second nature to me, because I understand Shakespearean language better than the modern written word. I love this eloquent piece! |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I also love Shakespeare, although I'm just starting to get into it...this was a beautiful beautiful piece. ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 08-18-99).] |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I certainly am glad someone's out there pulling up some of the good poems I missed while I was teaching last month.... Your Shakespearean rhyme scheme is nicely intact - just a tuck here and there on your iambics, and you're looking at perfection.... ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 |
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