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Tim
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0 posted 1999-07-01 11:05 PM


The doctor said, shan't make it through the night
Frail old woman, asleep in fading light
I tiptoed in and stood beside her bed
And as she woke, I heard her as she said,
Did you read the letter, Johnny sent to me?
It's right there on the table, take a look and see
Johnny is my only child, he's gone away to war
Last night I got his letter, and now I'm sad no more
Johnny says he loves me, a hero he's become
He says the war is over, and soon to home he'll come
Will you be so kind sir, and read as nurse has done
For my eyesight fails me, the letter from my son
As I reach for letter, I see her fade away
At peace with her creator, I slowly go my way
In hand I held her letter, from president it read
We regretfully inform you ma'am, that John, your son is dead....

© Copyright 1999 Tim - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 1999-07-01 11:30 PM


This touched me. It was so sad!
jfreak
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2 posted 1999-07-02 03:48 AM


A true hero he is though. No greater sacrifice than that of a man who lays down his life for another. I have never been so mad in my life, as when I watched Saving Private Ryan and that coward that fought to set the POW free, just froze on the staircase as the former POW killed his two buddies, then he just let him walk away as he sat there and cried like a little woose that he was. Then the same POW killed some other guys. All b/c of that one COWARD who was too afraid to fight. Johny is truely one of the great heros. He wasn't a coward and he laid down his life. No greater honor than that. Unless your his mother.

Jfreak

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3 posted 1999-07-02 07:08 AM


Thanks for this Tim. I cried, yes, I admit it. Wonderful poetry!




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4 posted 1999-07-02 09:10 AM


Little white lies can sometimes mean so much. Thank you for this thoughtful touch
for the dying mother needed such.


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Tim
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5 posted 1999-07-02 06:49 PM


Thank you all for your kind comments...

Craig
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6 posted 1999-07-02 07:05 PM


Superb!

A complete and concise work written in a way that said so much in such an easy to read style. That is for me the mark of a good Poem. ( I’m just sorry I can’t recreate this in my rambles )

Superb!

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8 posted 1999-07-04 02:58 PM


Once more for the Fourth...
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9 posted 1999-07-22 11:00 PM


thanks for the goosebumps...*sigh*

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If I had my mouth I would bite.
If I had my liberty I would do my liking.
In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~


Delores Hall
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10 posted 1999-07-23 12:38 PM


This is a beautiful poem.The crem da la crem.
Happy writing

[This message has been edited by Delores Hall (edited 07-23-99).]

angel girl
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11 posted 1999-07-23 04:09 AM


This poem was great. It reminded me of the story "The Fighting Sullivans." It was very touching.

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