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one voice
Junior Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 38
Billings, MT USA

0 posted 1999-07-01 02:15 PM


Hidden asunder that peaceful blackness
'neath the blanket of comfort and down
lies that euphoric body
relieved from exhaustion.

Angels in white fly down from the moon-
hover at the bedside and kiss the eyes,
Leaving one able to fade away
from reality;
To drift away in to
sweet slumber.

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~one voice~

***For myself I Live,
Live intensely and am fed by life,
and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression
of that. -Henry James

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invertigo18
Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 53
Prairieville, LA., USA
1 posted 1999-07-01 02:43 PM


Well written, it's a very suggestive poem. It could be more, metered, but the idea is cool. Keep up the good work.

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Luke Cakalic

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