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Newguy
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since 1999-06-27
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Moultrie, GA, USA

0 posted 1999-06-30 12:25 PM


Lost

A creature inside a changing time.
Morphing, growing, dying, and being reborn.
Where does it begin?
Where does it end?
In birth we die.
In dying we are born.
Looking, waiting, trying to find the answer.
The answer to the question, that is, as we all are, lost.


Commonly Missing


People are and people do.
Some people lie; some are true.
But looking into the eyes of the crowd,
I see that they all are good, are proud.
But evil abounds, and those people submit
To the grasp of immaturity; a bottomless pit.
So now look at the world, it's days and its nights
It's plauged with lies, drugs, and fights.
So now answer the question I humbly propose
Whats commonly missing, the heart or the knows?

A dollar to the person who can figure out the last line, :-)



© Copyright 1999 Newguy - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
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1 posted 1999-06-30 01:06 PM


i like em . does it have tuh do with pinnocio i dunno
Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 847
Ohio
2 posted 1999-06-30 01:58 PM


Very nice....
I'd take a guess and say the last line refers to the heart and the mind. Correct? So, what's missing...I'd say a little of both.

BTW......Welcome to the family Keith. Isn't this a wonderful place??!!!

[This message has been edited by Sally S. (edited 06-30-99).]

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
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TEXAS (it's all big)
3 posted 1999-06-30 02:54 PM


you mean it aint bout pinnochio when he lies there grows his knows
Newguy
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since 1999-06-27
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Moultrie, GA, USA
4 posted 1999-06-30 04:04 PM


Sally S almost hit the nail on the head!! It sybolizes that people don't use their knowledge and hearts to determine what they do. Congrats, SS!

:-)

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
5 posted 1999-06-30 04:46 PM


Great work!
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