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WhenDovesCry
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 16
California, USA

0 posted 1999-06-30 02:04 AM


A fierceness unmatched, the shades drawn tight
I turn my back swiftly, shutting out the light.
Happiness and laughter a thing of the past,
Visions of sorrow and self-doubt are cast.
Embraced by darkness, I just want to leave...
The life that has hurt me more than you can conceive.
But such a journey requires strength and courage...
Qualities which I no longer possess, but rather discourage.
Many faces are presented throughout the day...
Smiles often forced, while my eyes tell the truth I want to say.
Crying inside, unable to express why...
But silence falls to silence, no one willing to try.
Too scared to give up, too scared to go on,
I stand in the middle and try to be strong.
So crouched in the corner, down on my knees...
I hope one day for this pain to be relieved.


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DreamEvil
Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-06-30 02:14 AM


I love your rendition of a life so bitter that it's not even worth ending it. Very inspiring.

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Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities.


Raven
Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 67
Hopewell Jct, New York, USA
2 posted 1999-06-30 06:29 PM


Wow, you have a way with words, this poem is both powerful and moving.


*~*Raven*~*
WhenDovesCry
Junior Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 16
California, USA
3 posted 1999-06-30 09:28 PM


thank you DreamEvil and Raven...so very much...it means a lot to me that you enjoyed and appreciated this...
evolution
Junior Member
since 1999-06-24
Posts 22
ma, usa
4 posted 1999-06-30 09:47 PM


i thought this was well wriiten. your wording is excellent, i can really feel the emotions that you are trying to convey. wel done!!!
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