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WhenDovesCry
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 16
California, USA

0 posted 1999-06-29 02:18 AM


Consumed with thoughts of a bird in flight,
Graceful and elegant, it flies into the night.
Tossing and turning instead of peaceful sleep...
Fears and angers do begin to seep.
Rest never comes, eyes focused to the sky,
Filled with tears and always ready to cry.
Unconscious desires creep into your mind...
Such late hours are not for every kind.
Consumed with thoughts of a bird in flight...
Fly away, too, I just might.

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Alysia
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since 1999-06-26
Posts 35
american falls, idaho usa
1 posted 1999-06-29 03:23 AM


*sigh* beautiful. I can't think of a better way to say it. So somber and calm that I feel as if your freedom is felt through me. you take the reader to a place that only you know and let them explore something you treasure...that's how to write fantastic poetry. I'm in awe.

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~ Alysia*

WhenDovesCry
Junior Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 16
California, USA
2 posted 1999-06-29 08:32 PM


Alysia...
Wow...thank you...thank you for feeling it the way I wanted to write it. I've never shared my poetry with anyone before...I'm glad it's going well so far

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