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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 1999-06-28 08:23 PM


Divorcing A Friend

Twisted words among people we trust
endlessly leaping forward creating dust.
Cherish this, a fool I was once,
but never again shall I be your dunce.
You washed the walls with my soul,
and left with me a gapping hole.
Blind corners drive your ambitions
leaving you blissfully lost,
creating nasty dispositions.

I failed to color in the lines
you traced for me,
so now my volcanic anger is all you see.
I saw in you a beautiful portrait
of a friend,
but no longer can my army of feelings
continue to defend.
I traveled through your destructive journey,
thankful now that divorcing a friend
requires no attorney.

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Christina Myers
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since 1999-06-21
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1 posted 1999-06-28 10:38 PM


good lines...good lines... I particularly enjoy that last stanza quite a bit...

bravo.


-Christina

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And I thought: this is how poetry is born. It comes from invisible heights, it is secret and dark in its origins, solitary and fragrant, and like the river it will assimilate whatever falls in its current; it will seek a route between the mountains, and its crystalline song will ripple through the meadows."- Pablo Neruda

Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
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2 posted 1999-06-29 12:02 PM


Christina is right. The last stanza is a killer! I hope I'm always on your good side.
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
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3 posted 1999-06-29 08:15 AM


Yeah.....
The Lost Dreamer has found us... Nice to see you here!!

Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
4 posted 1999-06-29 05:03 PM


Thank-you all for your kind words.
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