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Still the Daughter |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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It is silly and trite to say you were born For how else would you ever be here Even though I thought you a miracle And bore you with grateful tears. And trite also the words that you grew and grew And I struggled mightily to know the real you As you went from childhood to teen to young woman The drift between us became a chasm between two. Stubborn? Oh, how you broke my heart When at 18 you “knew best” and “it’s time to part”. And I tried to comfort myself, that it didn’t matter But foolish me, you are still the daughter. A child having a child, you were not aware Of the heartbreak you brought, and without a care And said “yes he is the father, but I love him not” I knew in my heart this wasn’t what you were taught. Pressure I did for you to marry the man Shortly before the innocent babe was born I knew I had to take this harsh but correct stand Capitulate you did on this fervent command. I think you tried, though heaven knows You grew away, although the child in bows Was presented to me as “grandmother dear” And “I’ll never keep her from you, never fear.” Was it just us, my daughter, you and me, That couldn’t foresee yours, or my, destiny? I care now for the child of yours with blood of me Wondering as you drift along in your “doom” of free. To wonder at your of wanderlust, you thinking you know best To leave your child at her father’s chest And leave me with thoughts about what really mattered But even now, you’re still the Daughter. You should know I pray for you, although I cannot condone All of the wrongs you have done throughout time. I will capitulate now, and thank you for leaving In my care, for me to share, with this granddaughter mine. For she is now the Daughter. |
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Genea Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 321USA |
Strong emotions and quite a lesson in this, but very difficult to read aloud....i did not find that it flowed very well. Solemn message. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you Genea for your comments: it doesn't help that I found a mistake in it after three proof readings. I breath a lot between my thoughts (especially when the circumstances are real), which may be why it is hard for you to read. I appreciate your input. |
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Genea Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 321USA |
Sunshine, Maybe i have weird ears that only hear certain meter! hehe ~Genea |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
What a blessing, that your daughter loved and trusted you enough to know that this child needed you. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I see my entire brood as "my munchkins" - and they never go far from home....  ------------------ Nan's Morsels netpoets.net/nan/index.html |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
simply marvelous, your emotions touched me deeply ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Elvira. It's my hope to reach someone, anyone, if I can. ------------------ Sunshine Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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